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by stuartryder
Sun Dec 08, 2019 12:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cried into my curry
Replies: 1
Views: 96

Cried into my curry

Left in such a hurry Cried into my curry No time left to worry Went into the zoo Looking just for you Failed because you Were in a different cage With your different rage Distant by an age Of human science Teaching self reliance Refusing my compliance. No time left to worry Leaving in a hurry Crying...
by stuartryder
Wed Oct 23, 2019 7:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Ghosts at Herculaneum
Replies: 5
Views: 278

Ghosts at Herculaneum

These ghosts were in a
Group of a few
Hundred who were stranded

In the town, took shelter
In stone beach huts
But,

Ultimately,
Were buried along with
Their names.
by stuartryder
Wed Aug 21, 2019 5:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Different Stations
Replies: 14
Views: 667

Re: Different Stations

Nice; brevity is achieved. I did wonder if bringing it all into the present tense might lend it extra intensity and relateable and challenges the reader finding themselves in a similar predicament..? Just my thoughts.

Thanks - nice work.

Stuart
by stuartryder
Tue Aug 20, 2019 7:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Nonsense limericks
Replies: 4
Views: 284

Nonsense limericks

Once, I wrote a bunch of some, which have not survived, but I remember four of them, so here they be, if anyone has any suggestions as to form and content... If chertibils grint at the skite When you swash at their 'bubs with a gyte, Then who cleans the libbins Attanched to their dibbins? And hown c...
by stuartryder
Mon Aug 19, 2019 1:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Theseus in Old Age
Replies: 11
Views: 745

Re: Theseus in Old Age

Yeah I like this one a lot, would only ask if the commas can be presented in the "normal" way with a space after them - it makes for easier reading.

It sounds like a monologue by a priestess in a movie about Theseus, or something of that cinematic feel.

Cheers

Stuart
by stuartryder
Mon Aug 19, 2019 12:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dreams
Replies: 7
Views: 409

Re: Dreams

All in all I enjoyed the inversion. A couple of observations: - Although each verse (I find the word strophe pretentious!) ends with a long ee sound, the stress on those final words is different, eg the SEA; SHOULD be; WITH me; like to BE; PERfectly... I don't know if that matters to you or not but ...
by stuartryder
Thu May 18, 2017 7:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The softness in the light
Replies: 1
Views: 460

The softness in the light

Promise to pay some contributions back!! This is kind of a second first-draft... any views? Thanks Stuart The softness in the light * Brodie, she called herself, and there was this softness in her, a soft light - even though her hat was cruelly curved, her cheekbones cut right through me, and when I...
by stuartryder
Thu Sep 15, 2016 8:15 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Poets' Graves meet-up 2016
Replies: 110
Views: 35995

Re: Poets' Graves meet-up 2016

So, um, what date are we looking at again?

I'm asking because I've got job stuff to consider (promotion!) and my payday is weird so I will need to work out whether I've got the wherewithal (as a stereotypical skint poet) to attend...

Stuart
by stuartryder
Thu Sep 15, 2016 8:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A found poem from one of my primary schoolbooks...
Replies: 5
Views: 692

A found poem from one of my primary schoolbooks...

Eyes

Eyes are different
colours my eyes are
blue the middle part is
called the pupil it is like a
window and it lets in
light the coloured part
is called their is the
eye lashes stop dirt
coming
by stuartryder
Thu May 19, 2016 7:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Not sure what to call this ... any ideas?
Replies: 13
Views: 1017

Re: Not sure what to call this ... any ideas?

"Oh Mr Callin, it's awful"?

Stuart
by stuartryder
Wed May 11, 2016 9:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: What smooth beast?
Replies: 11
Views: 1161

Re: What smooth beast?

Hi Bod Enjoyed the read. I hate the term " it flowed" but, um, it did. The rhythm of the lines and the diction made it work, for me. One or two typos. Your next edit will address that I'm sure, for the sake of precision. I didn't like the "name redacted" really - until the end, when it kinda made se...
by stuartryder
Wed May 11, 2016 9:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Eloping
Replies: 4
Views: 681

Eloping

Hi crew - rip it to pieces cheers so I can get it just right :) Cheers Stuart * Eloping I guess, your parents aren't best pleased. Well... Send them pictures; that crème fraiche dress in a swirl around the lariccio pine, us against the Corsican rock. “Wish you were here, but hey we saved you a packe...
by stuartryder
Wed May 11, 2016 9:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Vestiges (ballade) Revision 2
Replies: 5
Views: 638

Re: Vestiges (ballade) Revision

Hi RC

Had a quick read - can't focus on a full response yet - enjoyed the energy though. Will delve deeper, for sure.

Cheers

Stuart
by stuartryder
Wed May 11, 2016 8:40 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: A heron in the tree
Replies: 8
Views: 2812

Re: A heron in the tree

Hey, thanks viewers... not even sure if I've got the original any more - this was one of the herons last season that (all things taken relatively) didn't mind me getting a wee bit closer than expected. Still very nervy though. It flew up into that tree and I was shooting at about 135mm on an APS-C (...
by stuartryder
Mon May 09, 2016 10:54 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Poets' Graves meet-up 2016
Replies: 110
Views: 35995

Re: Poets' Graves meet-up 2016

http://www.manchesterliteraturefestival.co.uk/

Just a possible activities for some visiting peeps...

Stuart
by stuartryder
Mon May 09, 2016 10:49 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Windows 10
Replies: 8
Views: 1920

Re: Windows 10

I use 7 on my desktop and 10 on my laptop. After a couple of months getting used to it, I quite like 10. But I prefer 7.

Stuart
by stuartryder
Wed Apr 20, 2016 6:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Flash and The Sacrificial Fire
Replies: 3
Views: 744

Re: The Flash and The Sacrificial Fire

You lost me at dolphins have hayfever Sorry, this is making no sense at all. It seems to be a random collection of pseudo-profound phrasings. Ros So, poetry, then?! I took it at face value and as you say, a collection of images some of which were strong, and I quite liked some of the inverted langu...
by stuartryder
Wed Apr 20, 2016 6:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Regression
Replies: 7
Views: 805

Re: Regression

Nice work ray, I consider you a benchmark In half-rhymes, And your witty treatments are pin-sharp Almost every time. Cheers from a grateful reader, Stuart Ryder She was regarded as the finest Regression Therapist in our district, claimed the roots of my midlife crisis could be unearthed in ancient h...
by stuartryder
Wed Apr 20, 2016 5:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Fitting In
Replies: 10
Views: 848

Re: Fitting In

Great stuff! I love swans. Cheers for the read. Stuart Follow the swans to Iceland. Join the skein as it passes. The art is to wear black socks, stretch, flap in your carefully re-designed white quilt, snug-fit, neatly hiding your secret mode of flight. If one stares, stare back. Though there may be...
by stuartryder
Wed Apr 20, 2016 12:11 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Poets' Graves meet-up 2016
Replies: 110
Views: 35995

Re: Poets' Graves meet-up 2016

You can room at mine if need be :) stuart
by stuartryder
Mon Apr 18, 2016 10:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On Howley Footbridge
Replies: 9
Views: 863

Re: On Howley Footbridge

Okay, I had a go at a rewrite, something tells me it might be a bit of a Marmite edit, but I'm only really getting back into writing and trying to apply a style ethic of playfully-serious, so, um... any comments welcome! * On Howley Footbridge with its steel crucifixes, I search for the seal who too...
by stuartryder
Mon Apr 18, 2016 7:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Doon the Pit (Was Nightshift)
Replies: 20
Views: 1556

Re: Night Shift (revision 2)

Hello JJ

Nice read. Not got any frame of reference for the sort of historical side of the poem but the images are strong.

Was there a conscious allusion to Dulce Et Decorum Est in the "Gas! Gas!" section?

Cheers

Stuart
by stuartryder
Mon Apr 18, 2016 7:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Elementary Catastrophe Theory
Replies: 13
Views: 1080

Re: Elementary Catastrophe Theory

Hi Ros - is catastrophe theory an actual thing? I guess from your usual type of writing, that it is. Thanks for the lesson! I wondered if you could trim the lines a bit so it came across as less hypotheses and more of a story? eg remove the "let us suppose" and "let us have" - those kind of bits... ...
by stuartryder
Mon Apr 18, 2016 7:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On Howley Footbridge
Replies: 9
Views: 863

Re: On Howley Footbridge

Thanks readers - as usual, very good observations which I'll work on in a revision :) As they say, a poem fails if it needs explaining, so hey-ho! Couple of notes: - Found despair related to the graffiti referred to in the previous stanza - The switch to "you" is intentional as the story of the poem...
by stuartryder
Thu Apr 14, 2016 11:28 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Small Talk - revised
Replies: 17
Views: 1066

Re: Small Talk - revised

Enjoyed it Ray - one of those poems that doesn't need much in the way of dissection or critiquing, in my opinion.

I wonder if the "still" could be "just" in v1..? Just a penn'orth for you.

Cheers

Stuart