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by bobblekat
Thu Nov 06, 2008 7:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Tidal Man
Replies: 1
Views: 264

Tidal Man

A wave washes over you, before you know the water retreats. It overwhelms you and then it’s gone, Only to return with a greater force. The current pulls you in and you learn to swim, Until the ebb takes away the water. You’re left to stand on ground, not solid though, it’s soft and wet, you slowly s...
by bobblekat
Wed Oct 22, 2008 6:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: a free lunch
Replies: 12
Views: 917

Re: a free lunch

Longing may have be a topic that is covered in a million ways, but I certainly could identify with the sentiment (I better hold off with my endless poems on the subject matter then, heh).

Nice work.
by bobblekat
Wed Oct 22, 2008 5:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Courage to All New Poets
Replies: 7
Views: 651

Re: Courage to All New Poets

Agree with Raisin, the punctuation in the first few lines stops the flow a little, but other than that lovely little piece which indeed gave me courage, and a smile. :)

BKX
by bobblekat
Mon Oct 20, 2008 7:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Chicken on a Sunday
Replies: 18
Views: 1248

Re: Chicken on a Sunday

Quirky little piece there, Barrie. I won't lie and say I understand what it's about, although my mind filled in the missed Saturday with debauched drinking, but then that probably says more about me, the reader, than you the writer ;-)

I enjoyed it.
by bobblekat
Mon Oct 20, 2008 6:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Umbrage
Replies: 9
Views: 750

Re: Umbrage

Thanks everyone - and thanks for the suggestions Barrie. I initially started out with all my writing to omit punctuation unless needed to make a point, such as the question mark in this case. But am starting to realise that maybe punctuation is indeed preferred. ;-) I have never shared of of my writ...
by bobblekat
Sun Oct 19, 2008 5:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Umbrage
Replies: 9
Views: 750

Umbrage

There is a certain shadiness
To your behaviour
Hiding away from my sun
Yet you still glance at it

Afraid to get burnt -
Or do you prefer to remain pale?

Left to shield myself from myself
Your vagueness
Causes umbrage
I shall remain pale too
by bobblekat
Sun Oct 19, 2008 5:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Winter’s stalking
Replies: 16
Views: 1428

Re: Winter’s stalking

Very topical, and quite sad. I see what Barrie tried to do with his version, but what I like about Dante's piece is that at first it conjured up images of warm cosy fires, but then I realised it was about solitude in old age and the feeling of warmness I felt turned into coldness in the instance of ...
by bobblekat
Sat Oct 18, 2008 8:36 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Forever Young
Replies: 15
Views: 1100

Re: Forever Young

Hey El Wow

nice piece, I really pictured the scene and the line alarming old ladies and charming younger ones made me smile and chuckle a little.

well done.

:)
by bobblekat
Sat Oct 18, 2008 8:29 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hello, be gentle with me ;-)
Replies: 3
Views: 825

Hello, be gentle with me ;-)

Hello all I have been searching for a forum like this for a while, glad to have found it. :-) I only started writing poetry this year, partially through discovering poetry in general (yes, I am a very late starter!), partially through having bit of a rough time and needing a release, and it does hel...