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by calico
Mon Dec 05, 2011 1:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Wasted
Replies: 3
Views: 409

Re: Wasted

Yup, interesting! I like reading these......
by calico
Mon Dec 05, 2011 1:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Of Owls and Apple Trees
Replies: 3
Views: 563

Re: Of Owls and Apple Trees

thanks Suzanne!
Thanks for posting this John I didn't get round to it and it's nice to see it here!
by calico
Thu Dec 01, 2011 4:22 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hello
Replies: 4
Views: 2076

Re: Hello

Nice to meet you GiantR! Nice name.
Megan
by calico
Thu Dec 01, 2011 11:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: How to release your house from the grip of daytime inertia,
Replies: 7
Views: 419

Re: How to release your house from the grip of daytime inert

Thanks Mic. It was surprisingly easy to get out of the house, which doesn't then live up to the notion of its "grip", making the rest of the poem a bit of an afterthought perhaps.
I'll change the collective frostbite.
Mic wrote:risks
Definitely find myself posting less developed things these days.
by calico
Thu Dec 01, 2011 10:29 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Back Woods
Replies: 22
Views: 1379

Re: Back Woods

Enjoying this Ben...... The wintry poems are upon us. I particularly like your sentence structures in the first and final stanzas. These two lines in my opinion are weaker than the rest: as poplars screech and crack beneath the weight. and Go ask the lake for food that we may eat, Lacking in complex...
by calico
Thu Dec 01, 2011 10:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: How to release your house from the grip of daytime inertia,
Replies: 7
Views: 419

How to release your house from the grip of daytime inertia,

v3 Open the drawer, inside are cable ties used for flowers at pedestrian crossings. Hit the mattress with a plank to release a shape from the hollow (where he laid out his penis colder than a crowbar his penis that might at any moment release spores.) You have to leave your body slumped there and ge...
by calico
Thu Dec 01, 2011 10:05 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (Redrafted) Not Moon Apart
Replies: 20
Views: 831

Re: Two Not Moon Apart

Hi there Antcliff I would have liked to read this without DT's moon cherub face in my mind - all sullen boy-man cheeks - I feel so sentimental about him and I can't work out if I would feel the same about your poem without that reference. "We littles" - oh God, it's so sentimental I love it, and the...
by calico
Thu Dec 01, 2011 9:26 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: PUSHING BUTTONS
Replies: 5
Views: 494

Re: PUSHING TUTOR BUTTONS

What a brilliant effort! I've got Tender Buttons somewhere, to go back to - - But this is heaven to read. Thanks.
by calico
Tue Nov 29, 2011 9:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Five days to go
Replies: 26
Views: 1620

Re: Five days to go

It's not like we have a polished gem - have you guys not got drafts you could post? But that would be ignoring the Competition aspect of things. That's a suggestion.
by calico
Mon Nov 28, 2011 10:29 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Five days to go
Replies: 26
Views: 1620

Re: Five days to go

I can't wait to see the results! Me and John are going to post something aren't we John?
by calico
Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The New Life
Replies: 14
Views: 805

Re: The New Life

the previous unprofitable year cold around my leg like a manacle. That's really Christmas Carol. It adds to the very Christmassey feeling I get from this - the frosty bridge, Narnia - without contradicting Easter somehow. Interesting comment about the combination of prosaic asides with the poetic: ...
by calico
Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Manoeuvre
Replies: 5
Views: 409

Re: Manoeuvre

Great. thanks. Quite right about the I's, how did I not see that!
JohnLott wrote:who are Glen and Matthew Allen - should I know them?
No!
by calico
Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: icon
Replies: 15
Views: 684

Re: icon

Yes. No. Yes, I was agreeing with you in a way that sounded argumentative, just to add to the confusion. And to pile it on, here goes, re: the couplets, I had a vague understanding that in the classic elegiac couplet the first line is longer than the second. So reversing that symbolised the role rev...
by calico
Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Manoeuvre
Replies: 5
Views: 409

Re: Manoeuvre

Really? Thanks! Trying to get punct. just right now.
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 9:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Coping
Replies: 24
Views: 1405

Re: Coping

Yes! "warn
Adam about believing women"

I think Geoff's got it perfect.
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 9:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Bad Co.
Replies: 10
Views: 480

Re: The Bad Co.

Oh my god. Brian you are unbelievable.
I thought maybe you'd been in a breakdancing troupe together in the past though it seemed unlikely.
Good task too!
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 9:11 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Small stones
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Re: Small stones

Ah, sorry. The over-excitement was all mine.
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 3:08 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Small stones
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Re: Small stones

Mr Bod.
Nothing is happening when I click on......"right here"
Is it s'posed to?
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 2:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Bad Co.
Replies: 10
Views: 480

Re: The Bad Co.

Yes sire. Doesn't it have to be mo' bread then too?
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 2:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Coping
Replies: 24
Views: 1405

Re: Coping

Hi Ryan - haven't read the whole thread so just to say, I prefer your original version with the shrub - because that slight stumble in the rhythm is welcome for me - like a sob - oh! Talking of which, I'm not enormously keen on the title. I like the poem a lot though by the way. So in your edit you ...
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 1:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Bad Co.
Replies: 10
Views: 480

Re: The Bad Co.

christmas? Do I have to google? really? Is this a tribute to someone? Anyway never mind all the questions. I like it, except I read apostrophes like this: "Mo' bling than kings." as archaic ommissions, because I'm.....British, and then I wonder what Morbling is, but I think I can, you know, dig it. ...
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 1:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Manoeuvre
Replies: 5
Views: 409

Manoeuvre

v2 The first time I asked her out she was in the Leisure Centre with an ex, that’s why she said “Piss off”. But she said it politely, so I studied her in Geography, I made maps. I crossed the river to her house and fell in: she had to lend me her Dad’s clothes. The wedding took place locally, she w...
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 11:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: When I was Born
Replies: 12
Views: 937

Re: When I was Born

Who or what are you?! This is definitely fun - lots of surprises - like the Madejski stadium outside Reading gaol...Time-travelling? It's overwritten in places I think - like I love this line: Pleasure was silence, potatoes, leeks and flowers. But I'd prefer it without the 'silence', letting me work...
by calico
Fri Nov 25, 2011 10:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: icon
Replies: 15
Views: 684

Re: icon

David - thanks for that. I've re-read it again now myself and can't see how it could be about anything other than the mother/child and sibling relationship treated as archetypes. And having to reject one child that you love to defend another. But again, treated archetypally. And maybe when you treat...
by calico
Sun Nov 20, 2011 9:02 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Small stones
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Re: Small stones

I'd like to. January you say?
Do we get a 'funky badge' like they do? :)