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by barrie
Sat Jan 03, 2009 6:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Meeting with the Almighty
Replies: 20
Views: 3173

Re: A Meeting with the Almighty

Thanks for the honest reponse, Nigel. There isn't much in the way of mechanics to look into and the metaphysics should be read more tongue-in-cheek. Like I said in an earlier post, it's just a light-hearted response to the idea of determinism , a thread that was started in Any Other Business by Thok...
by barrie
Sat Jan 03, 2009 4:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Meeting with the Almighty
Replies: 20
Views: 3173

Re: A Meeting with the Almighty

Thanks beau - Can't help you with virgins I'm afraid, I dont know any.

cheers

Barrie
by barrie
Sat Jan 03, 2009 10:41 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Home Song
Replies: 7
Views: 717

Re: Home Song

Only one suggestion here, Jimmy - I would say lose 'to sow their seed . I'm not going to say it's a bit of a cliche, but it is, and I have. the hatching ground that pulls them back to spawn, to round out life in stony writhing strings Again, good use of assonance and sprinkled with ryhmes. Good one ...
by barrie
Sat Jan 03, 2009 10:12 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Meeting with the Almighty
Replies: 20
Views: 3173

Re: A Meeting with the Almighty

Thanks Kim & Tim. 'I made it so' am I the only sad puppy who was reminded of Captain Jean-Luc Picard? - Never saw it 'til you mentioned it - he always gave the instruction. Now that you have mentioned Picard, I can imagine the poem being a dialogue between him and Q. Next time you have a word with B...
by barrie
Sat Jan 03, 2009 9:39 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Discussion related to 'De Kinder' in the Experienced section
Replies: 13
Views: 1692

Re: Discussion related to 'De Kinder' in the Experienced section

I'm not sure what a "staunch" atheist is... - I think you are as aware of the meaning of staunch atheist as you are as to the meaning of semantics. Nothing I have said about determinism is inconsistent with the belief that there is no God. - I never disputed that, I said you sounded like a cleric, ...
by barrie
Fri Jan 02, 2009 4:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Potter no potter...
Replies: 12
Views: 1122

Re: Potter no potter...

So I was wrong.......now I'm left with ek on my phrasis.

Ah well...
by barrie
Fri Jan 02, 2009 1:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Potter no potter...
Replies: 12
Views: 1122

Re: Potter no potter...

I quite like this - I like the form, but, showing ignorance, I don't recognize it. I take it that the 'potter' is really a poet and that the poem an exercise in ekphrasis(?). Then again, I could be wrong - it wouldn't be the first time. BTW - Welcome to PG, hope you find it helpful. Don't forget to ...
by barrie
Thu Jan 01, 2009 4:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Season's Greetings
Replies: 20
Views: 2114

Re: Season's Greetings

k-j wrote:Why doesn't new year have a character / personification?
- It always used to have - It had two: a white bearded old man carrying a scythe, representing the old year, accompanied by a crawling infant - the new year. I've not seen these two characters for years.

Happy New Year to everyone.

Barrie
by barrie
Wed Dec 31, 2008 6:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Pressing on
Replies: 8
Views: 779

Re: Pressing on

Have you opened a bottle yet? Right, the poem. is frozen solid would be better replaced with freezes . Water seeps into the soil and freezes, Injuries that struck bone - throughout my life All life's bone-deep injuries - just a thought. ...and don't remind me how old I am again. nice one Barrie
by barrie
Wed Dec 31, 2008 6:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stranger trades
Replies: 31
Views: 2046

Re: Stranger trades

I agree with Jimmy about at the end of his tether, but I think the articles in L3 are just fine.
It says a lot about the type of newspaper you read (it must surely be one from Yorkshire). I guess it means whatever the reader takes from it - a very surreal image.

Intriguing.

nice one

Barrie
by barrie
Tue Dec 30, 2008 12:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Meeting with the Almighty
Replies: 20
Views: 3173

Re: A Meeting with the Almighty

Thanks Ben - I get some strange ideas, so it's not surprising when they don't strike chord - I blame God. Thanks David - Yes, I know the story, it's a good one, but the poem wasn't written with that in mind. The idea came from Thoke and his topic in Any Other Business on determinism - I'm more for i...
by barrie
Mon Dec 29, 2008 5:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Meeting with the Almighty
Replies: 20
Views: 3173

A Meeting with the Almighty

I'll see you tomorrow, I said. I'll be there, but you won't, came the retort. What makes you say that? I know everything, I made it so. If you're saying it's all preordained, then I'll prove you wrong. I knew you'd say that, so I moved you forward by a day. You never showed up. How do you know, you'...
by barrie
Mon Dec 29, 2008 1:52 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Discussion related to 'De Kinder' in the Experienced section
Replies: 13
Views: 1692

Re: Discussion related to 'De Kinder' in the Experienced section

Ben, for a staunch atheist you sound exactly like a member of the clergy. Ask one of them a difficult question and they'll answer, "Because God wills it" . In other words, it's pre-ordained and there's not a damn thing that eternity can do about it. The only difference is something that cannot be kn...
by barrie
Mon Dec 29, 2008 1:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Winter takes guard
Replies: 7
Views: 724

Re: Winter takes guard

David wrote:I don't balk too much at puddles as a verb
- Neither do I, but reading -

December rain puddles, it sounds like a noun.

December rain
puddles crease and outfield.
- Would make it clear straight away.

Barrie
by barrie
Mon Dec 29, 2008 12:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stepshot
Replies: 8
Views: 791

Re: Stepshot

Practically minimalist for you - I'd like to make it even shorter. with her thoughts contained within a cage: to thoughts caged - You could (maybe) remove with her (hair) . trippingly, high-heeled upon the stage, hair sheening, teeth gleaming, thoughts caged: my daughter my sister... I've not worke...
by barrie
Mon Dec 29, 2008 11:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: An apparition
Replies: 12
Views: 1010

Re: An apparition

No mistaking the style, is there? I have three questions - Was it an actual person in fancy dress going to, or coming from some party over Christmas? Was it an actual apparition seen whilst you were driving? If you had been breathalized shortly after seeing the apparition, would you have been arrest...
by barrie
Mon Dec 29, 2008 11:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Winter takes guard
Replies: 7
Views: 724

Re: Winter takes guard

Winter Asks for Middle & Leg, and Makes his Mark might be a better title. No, seriously, I quite like the title: it doesn't give away anything about the poem, but after reading it, it's a fine choice. I'm not too keen on the line break after puddles in V1. As it is, I read puddles as a noun instead...
by barrie
Sat Dec 27, 2008 4:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dark cashier (Merry Christmas everyone))
Replies: 14
Views: 1170

Re: Dark cashier (Merry Christmas everyone))

Many thanks, Kim.

cheers - Barrie
by barrie
Sat Dec 27, 2008 4:05 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Pinter
Replies: 3
Views: 456

Re: Pinter

Nice bit of silence just before the end - You've beaten EJ Thribb to this one.

I like it

Barrie
by barrie
Fri Dec 26, 2008 5:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dark cashier (Merry Christmas everyone))
Replies: 14
Views: 1170

Re: Dark cashier (Merry Christmas everyone))

Thanks a lot Elph and Dante - Indeed - I wandered into a Woolies this morning and thought of this poem. Very sad to see staff stocking shelves knowing their jobs have gone. It was all summed up by the signs saying that the racking and shelving was also for sale - Everything Must Go was truer than tr...
by barrie
Thu Dec 25, 2008 8:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A musing
Replies: 5
Views: 566

Re: A musing

Now, it might be because it's Christmas Day and I'm still feeling the effects of last night and this afternoon, but I found this to be a little convoluted and I struggled to follow the thread. It would be easier to follow if it was set out as prose. It doesn't work for me as a poem - It's seems to b...
by barrie
Thu Dec 25, 2008 4:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Satan's Grotto
Replies: 3
Views: 458

Re: Satan's Grotto

A couple of suggestions concerning the sonics. Instead of drip in V1, leak might be a better option - the hard C sound goes with vampiric, ranks & canines . You could then use drips instead of drops in V2, L3, which leaves you an internal rhyme with tips from the end of V1 (just noticed the assonanc...
by barrie
Thu Dec 25, 2008 2:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Variations
Replies: 8
Views: 621

Re: Variations

A quick visit. Just a little confusion in the second variation . on this still green grass without notice the first snow What do mean by still here? Do you mean not moving , or do you mean unchanged ? What do you mean by without notice ? Without being observed or unannounced? Unannounced, the first ...
by barrie
Wed Dec 24, 2008 5:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7563
Views: 942682

Re: Haiku Train

I don't like horses,
never could eat a full one -
it just seems a waste.
by barrie
Wed Dec 24, 2008 5:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Season's Greetings
Replies: 20
Views: 2114

Re: Season's Greetings

Merry Christmas to everyone here....and merry everything else as well.

cheers

Barrie