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by clemonz
Sat Dec 06, 2014 3:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dancer
Replies: 4
Views: 619

Dancer

A frost has seized upon the sun,
small fingers grip a willing earth,
to dance off white, for in its worth,
lies the grace of a ballerina's run!

I'm unsure of its 'quality' but don't consider myself new to poetry soooo i hope it's ok to post here.
by clemonz
Sun Aug 17, 2014 9:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The way that I danced with you
Replies: 0
Views: 870

The way that I danced with you

The way that I danced with you A form of uncompromising closenss, lost in sweat dancing, to god knows what, embracing again. So high I forget how high I am, hearing only my own movements, seeing yours. Sweat, a “half formed thought” that we were already played this one tonight; or that they should....
by clemonz
Wed Aug 13, 2014 2:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: another rant ...
Replies: 3
Views: 670

Re: another rant ...

well mine neither ;) !!

the words means - my will i myself god, butr translates as "i wanted to beat god" - according to google translate.
by clemonz
Sat Aug 09, 2014 2:35 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: how do dictionaries work, really
Replies: 0
Views: 1146

how do dictionaries work, really

if i look up fearsome
Fearsome \Fear"some\ (f[=e]r"s[u^]m) a. 1. Frightful
then look up frightful
Informal. very great; extreme: That actor is very talented but a frightful ham

can i conclude that i may say that i am fearsome stupid, without striking fear? :D
by clemonz
Tue Aug 05, 2014 5:56 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: D O D G E M S
Replies: 0
Views: 887

D O D G E M S

“D O D G E M S” Happy birthday! A Bass Drum thumps over trance; fun, but not “dodging”, unable to, the turn is too big. Off, and bump. I alight, family stricken; it is not my birthday, I don't have to pretend anything, only smile. The host explodes again, it IS his birthday, a special “he has surge...
by clemonz
Tue Aug 05, 2014 4:43 am
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Meter / tin ears
Replies: 4
Views: 6257

Re: Meter / tin ears

i don't think that's the issue; i don't think the issue is being tone deaf. i think it's that i'm not compellingly musical.
by clemonz
Tue Aug 05, 2014 4:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A fetish
Replies: 12
Views: 1447

Re: A fetish

Suzanne - thanks, i think your edit is a good improvement.

bodkin, can you explain show don't tell, pls? not examples, but a specifi defintion ?
by clemonz
Sun Aug 03, 2014 1:26 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: another rant ...
Replies: 3
Views: 670

another rant ...

Mea volente Egomet Deo We play by the side of the Thames, happy enough with my niece. She falls, we pick her up; it's all very easy to maintain, a distance from each other without resentment. Now and then I remind myself how silly it is - how silence is like a lie or how alone I am in my own head, ...
by clemonz
Thu Jul 31, 2014 11:20 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: brutalism
Replies: 0
Views: 1186

brutalism

Daytripper by Adelle Stripe. The bed of Cock Beck is grey; oil, drip-dropped from the motorway planes, into the drain holes, into the Beck. My father stares into the water, talks of the pike, the trout, the chub, he caught and fed to us over the years. When mayflies danced to their own reflection, ...
by clemonz
Thu Jul 31, 2014 9:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A fetish
Replies: 12
Views: 1447

Re: A fetish

interesting replies, TU... the definition of fetish is a reading of das kapital - are these strophes not instances of fetishism :) ?
by clemonz
Tue Jul 29, 2014 9:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A fetish
Replies: 12
Views: 1447

Re: A fetish

ts eltio? but it's irrelevant, i'm no classicist etc
by clemonz
Tue Jul 29, 2014 1:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A fetish
Replies: 12
Views: 1447

Re: A fetish

what im GOING for:
conversational rhythms
structured like a plurality of voices - not diffeent tones really but developing the poem as it were part of a dialogue, but still making sense.
and a sense of violent excess...

i won't try exlaining why :D ! but .. ?
by clemonz
Mon Jul 28, 2014 3:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: painful words
Replies: 3
Views: 712

Re: painful words

ur right - it is a damp squib if you don't at least guess it's someone else.
by clemonz
Sun Jul 27, 2014 7:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A fetish
Replies: 12
Views: 1447

Re: A violent moving into the present

ok, i'm sorry for the typos.

i'm trying to write stuff that is more dynamic / energetic, than self consciously poetic - as bodkin has called my verses before.
by clemonz
Sat Jul 26, 2014 2:20 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Another Poetry Forum
Replies: 8
Views: 3698

Re: Another Poetry Forum

WRT the auto-critique in the op, it's probably laden with ironic tone - in their imagination hah
by clemonz
Sat Jul 26, 2014 11:22 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Another Poetry Forum
Replies: 8
Views: 3698

Re: Another Poetry Forum

i think anyone that says i'm "flatly denying relaity" in dismissing their criticism,,, is mad and that they have fallen into their own egotism, quite some time ago.
by clemonz
Sat Jul 26, 2014 4:00 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Another Poetry Forum
Replies: 8
Views: 3698

Re: Another Poetry Forum

i got banned from pigpen for literally nothing besides arguing that 'canto' is almost synonymous with pound's cantos. i tried another one,,, the top hit. i didn't much like it, maybe just the colour scheme tho :D here is OK, no-one is commenting on my poems and a couple of people have misunderstood ...
by clemonz
Sat Jul 26, 2014 3:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A fetish
Replies: 12
Views: 1447

A fetish

A fetish is when a doing is a having [tab][/tab] A violent movement into the present. A wound, or countdown, or a momentary sense of being ill at ease. The heat of midsummer will evoke a fan's circling the corners of my room, while at night I smoke to numb complacencies. [tab][/tab] I finish a ciga...
by clemonz
Sat Jul 26, 2014 12:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: painful words
Replies: 3
Views: 712

Re: painful words

My constant surrender Egotism spewsforth these ecrits, [tab][/tab]annulling me; a cancelled appointment, or a thuderclap. [tab][/tab]Do you know what, I'm bored of you. [tab][/tab]I could never stomach his cathartic fits, the sudden reality, or my constant surrender to them. ---- trying to begin to...
by clemonz
Thu Jul 24, 2014 4:36 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: John Ashbery
Replies: 13
Views: 3551

Re: John Ashbery

any tips on how to read / interpret an ashbery poem?
by clemonz
Thu Jul 24, 2014 8:29 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: moving on [WAS -it is as if she loved me]
Replies: 1
Views: 489

moving on [WAS -it is as if she loved me]

Moving on This weakness has possessed me all day. I cannot remember a time in which it made sense, when I felt like my weight was my own; a weakness as old as the world spinning against it. Only my psychosis puts up no struggle in the embrace, its memory a nauseating reoccurence of people who have ...
by clemonz
Thu Jul 24, 2014 12:28 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: is the following the cure to nihilism?
Replies: 1
Views: 1200

is the following the cure to nihilism?

please don't be a nihilist.
please.
no, please, for me :)
by clemonz
Mon Jul 21, 2014 4:51 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: painful words
Replies: 3
Views: 712

painful words

Painful words There is much vanity in these ecrits; as everything is forgettable, so I forget my place among them. A thunderclap, or a mistimed appointment. Do you know what I'm bored of you. I would prefer not to pretend I disagree: there is a kind of authenticity to his fits a momentary quality in...
by clemonz
Sun Jul 20, 2014 7:05 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: dylan thomas in the 21st century
Replies: 2
Views: 1452

dylan thomas in the 21st century

how relevant is he?

i'm reading some now, and he seems a nice foil to some of the contrivance of contemporary poetry, but his verse does stumble along here and there.

energetic, visceral, or bombastic or..?
by clemonz
Sat Jul 19, 2014 2:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: totally gratuitous poem
Replies: 0
Views: 887

totally gratuitous poem

Crossing μετά I don't think there's ever been a poet as good as me, the idea of equality belonging only to the rich, and successful. All that time on retroactive surfaces, “why not ask – if it bothers you”. It'd be so irreversible, like a cult, and a rhyme is a line of flight, or a capital letter. ...