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by StephenDedalus
Mon May 11, 2015 9:06 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Favourite lines of poetry
Replies: 13
Views: 3986

Re: Favourite lines of poetry

One that I love is the last line from 'Love in the Asylum' by Dylan Thomas...

"And taken by light in her arms at long and dear last
I may without fail
Suffer the first vision that set fire to the stars."
by StephenDedalus
Tue Mar 10, 2015 11:05 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Astral Walks
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Re: Astral Walks

A Van poem. I like it, but I'm a fan. And even I didn't recognise all the references. Interestingly enough, I didn't spot any in the last four lines, although I suspect that "It doesn't matter" must be one. But how much of you is really in here, Stephen? (A lot, I suppose, if one counts a great lov...
by StephenDedalus
Fri Mar 06, 2015 12:07 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: The Chain
Replies: 409
Views: 209968

Re: The Chain

Sorry it was too easy...

by StephenDedalus
Thu Mar 05, 2015 11:31 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: The Chain
Replies: 409
Views: 209968

Re: The Chain

Mary Jane...

by StephenDedalus
Thu Mar 05, 2015 12:53 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Astral Walks
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Re: Astral Walks

Thanks mate, very useful!
by StephenDedalus
Wed Mar 04, 2015 9:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Astral Walks
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Re: Astral Walks

Sure thing mate
by StephenDedalus
Wed Mar 04, 2015 9:53 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Astral Walks
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Re: Astral Walks

I see what you mean by 'poemy', Stephen - rivers of wind and leaves dancing, but it's just a matter of putting a bit of a twist on what you're saying. I like the link to the scientific at the end - perhaps you could turn it round and describe the movement of the leaves and the glow of the sun in a ...
by StephenDedalus
Wed Mar 04, 2015 8:48 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Astral Walks
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Re: Astral Walks

I definitely have a long way to go before my poems are better. I can't help but think that mine are all too 'poemy' haha, I signed up for a free poetry course online though, so hopefully I will learn some stuff in that when it starts (As well as from the always helpful critiques on here).
by StephenDedalus
Wed Mar 04, 2015 8:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Astral Walks
Replies: 12
Views: 1307

Astral Walks

I saw her walking down Botanic Avenue when the sun shone and on the train from Belfast, with the light in my head the sound of Sweet Thing came through the ether. Birds flutter over the golden lough. Meanwhile, a child who has no name strolls along the seashore. Winter is starting to give way to spr...
by StephenDedalus
Wed Mar 04, 2015 8:19 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: The Chain
Replies: 409
Views: 209968

Re: The Chain

Suzanne...

by StephenDedalus
Thu Feb 26, 2015 9:27 pm
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 493
Views: 194648

Re: Who's reading what?

Just finished reading Ulysses Marks out of ten? 9! Difficult to say anything that hasn't been said about it already, but I thought it was incredible and Joyce is a genius (Which I already knew, Dubliners and Portrait are two of my favourite books, hence my username). It was truly amazing, almost in...
by StephenDedalus
Thu Feb 26, 2015 9:00 pm
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 493
Views: 194648

Re: Who's reading what?

Just finished reading Ulysses
by StephenDedalus
Fri Feb 13, 2015 10:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A reply to j.alfred.
Replies: 5
Views: 785

Re: A reply to j.alfred.

Thanks chaps...no typo, it's meant to be read in a dundee accent...kinda....meaning..?...I just was moved by the feeling of lost or missed opportunity the Elliot's poem instilled in me, and I wrote that as a lighthearted riposte to remind myself to make the most of life....thank you for your commen...
by StephenDedalus
Fri Jan 30, 2015 9:27 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: New..
Replies: 8
Views: 3367

Re: New..

Hey, I am new also. This is a good place :D
by StephenDedalus
Fri Jan 30, 2015 6:46 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: The Chain
Replies: 409
Views: 209968

Re: The Chain

Joe Cocker is from Yorkshire

by StephenDedalus
Sat Jan 24, 2015 10:41 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poets that...
Replies: 12
Views: 2571

Re: Poets that...

That's a stunning piece, written with a real passion for the sounds of the words. Must be amazing to hear it read. You are in luck! haha for another poetry site I am on I did a reading of it. My accent isn't the most pleasant for reading poetry, certainly no Seamus Heaney, but for a poem like this ...
by StephenDedalus
Sat Jan 24, 2015 10:27 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poets that...
Replies: 12
Views: 2571

Re: Poets that...

Got any good examples of John Clare's work? I find this very interesting, the idea of cultural identity and how this manifests itself in poetry (from both the reader and the writer). It is a fascinating subject. It's difficult to pinpoint a single poem of Clare's that represents the county, it's mo...
by StephenDedalus
Sat Jan 24, 2015 9:18 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poets that...
Replies: 12
Views: 2571

Re: Poets that...

I'm from Northampton so it stands to reason that I like John Clare's work. He obviously lived in a different time but there's a definite recognition in the landscape he writes about that goes further than the place names and colloquialisms. Alan Moore, another Northamptonian, also writes about our ...
by StephenDedalus
Sat Jan 24, 2015 1:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Old Photographs
Replies: 10
Views: 911

Re: Old Photographs

Well chosen words and images, redolent of black and White photos of checkpoints etc. I like your clever use of red and green disturbing the black and white image, I'm my mind like the girl in the red dress in schindlers list against the black and white. Not keen on last line as your poem seems impa...
by StephenDedalus
Sat Jan 24, 2015 1:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Old Photographs
Replies: 10
Views: 911

Re: Old Photographs

Yep, I was thinking the same thing, that first line definitely needs to go. In fact, I'd go further and lose the first two lines to give a much more powerful opening with: "Balaclavas and makrolon face-shields." In the bit where it changes tone in the middle, this bit: As I look through the photos ...
by StephenDedalus
Fri Jan 23, 2015 10:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Old Photographs
Replies: 10
Views: 911

Re: Old Photographs

Thanks for the feedback fellas, much appreciated.
by StephenDedalus
Fri Jan 23, 2015 10:03 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poets that...
Replies: 12
Views: 2571

Re: Poets that...

There aren't any considerable poets that come from the same place I do but - although it's a pretty obvious choice - my background and that of Seamus Heaney aren't that dissimilar. Apart from the history of centuries of internecine hatred, of course. But there is often a sense of recognition about ...
by StephenDedalus
Fri Jan 23, 2015 10:01 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poets that...
Replies: 12
Views: 2571

Re: Poets that...

More poems than poets in my case. I do not have any of the language, but know the poem from the celebrated translation by Iain Crichton Smith....Sorley MacLean's Hallaig. It was also famously set to music by Martyn Bennett....attached. There was a time when I would have said "Time, the deer???" wha...
by StephenDedalus
Wed Jan 21, 2015 11:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Old Photographs
Replies: 10
Views: 911

Old Photographs

I feel pathos looking at these old photographs. Forty years of murder. Balaclavas and makrolon face-shields. AK-47s and SLRs. Civil rights marches, Orange parades and countless riots. As I look through the photos I wonder which side those mourners were on, and whether or not those children grew up t...
by StephenDedalus
Wed Jan 21, 2015 11:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Demon Within
Replies: 6
Views: 629

Re: The Demon Within

Hello, as others have said I think you have some interesting imagery. I like "fleshy folds of my normality" in particular as well. I do also agree that you need to work on your punctuation in order to help it read better. One glaring example for me is the lines "A beautiful twisted and lonely coveri...