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by camus
Sat Jan 11, 2020 9:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I found myself there
Replies: 7
Views: 898

Re: I found myself there

Thanks guys, some things to ponder; agreed with and not agreed with. I'll come back with alterations and explanations.

Cheers
Camus
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 12:48 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: You've Heard This One Before Haven't You
Replies: 15
Views: 1174

Re: You've Heard This One Before Haven't You

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Um what? Lol are you being funny?
Apparently not! lol.

I was quoting Morrissey, the Smith's song "Stop me if you think you've heard this one before"

Not of much use, then again neither is Morrissey these days.

Cheers
Camus
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 12:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This Can't Be Real
Replies: 13
Views: 819

Re: This Can't Be Real

Fair play to you, I didn't mean to sound disparaging, although I did! Be interested to see how this pans out in the re-write.
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 12:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I don't believe in poets (Revised v2)
Replies: 18
Views: 1197

Re: I don't believe in poets (Revised)

Mmmm, I think those examples are pushing it, I wouldn't distrust or not believe in any of those poets, well maybe Craig Charles, but that's more to do with his funk and soul show than anything else. So I guess my question is to tatterdemalion; who are these untrustworthy celebrity poets? I'm happy t...
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 12:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I don't believe in poets (Revised v2)
Replies: 18
Views: 1197

Re: I don't believe in poets (Revised)

Pam Ayres.

Apart from those two...
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 6:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I don't believe in poets (Revised v2)
Replies: 18
Views: 1197

Re: I don't believe in poets (Revised)

This doesn't ring true because poets don't go on television and play the part of the celebrities. Name me one who does? In fact name me two?
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 6:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Mudmen
Replies: 8
Views: 758

Re: The Mudmen

Onomatopoeia.
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 6:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I found myself there
Replies: 7
Views: 898

I found myself there

In a half-made-bed of a house most hair was shocked. There was a potty full of piss in the corner and conversations in headlocks. There was death on the televsion – loud door knocks – no answers – a dancer then to avoidance… She shook her stuff, till her clothes sunk in a heap beneath her – ether sh...
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 5:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This Can't Be Real
Replies: 13
Views: 819

Re: This Can't Be Real

but it is, in a form of poem Well, yes, but any form of any amount of alphabetical letters in any sequence can be seen as "poetry" Please explain the "Poetry" in this piece? I'm not the best crit here, in fact i'm probably the worst, so i do appreciate you answering, but you know, answer well! Cheers
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 3:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This Can't Be Real
Replies: 13
Views: 819

Re: This Can't Be Real

What a load of old shit. This was once a poetry forum, for poetry. Up your game sir, read some poets, digest, regurgitate, ensconce. This is crayon poetry. It doesn't belong here in any colour.

Cheers
by camus
Thu Jan 09, 2020 3:36 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: You've Heard This One Before Haven't You
Replies: 15
Views: 1174

Re: You've Heard This One Before Haven't You

Beejessus I thought for a moment I'd posted this in a drunken pseudo momentary lapse of reason. But i didn't, you did, who ever you are?

Stop me if you think you've heard this one before...

I've stopped.

Cheers
by camus
Fri Jun 14, 2019 8:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Wounded knees
Replies: 8
Views: 885

Re: Wounded knees

Geoff is that you? Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff... Sorry, got carried away. So happy to see you back here... "Don't bury my heart at Wounded Knee for I need it to lay a hand on." So, I was expecting a Cormac McCarthy type aff...
by camus
Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:55 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: The Chain
Replies: 408
Views: 199438

Re: The Chain

Nice. Leaving the Kinky behind and moving on to strange but affecting duos.

by camus
Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:53 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: The Chain
Replies: 408
Views: 199438

Re: The Chain

Good call sir, this needs resurrecting!

From the Kinks to Kinky Afro, with one of the finest opening lyrics known to man.

by camus
Wed Apr 24, 2019 9:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Perpetual Motion
Replies: 14
Views: 1986

Re: Perpetual Motion

Failed artist, failed musician, perpetual ME warrior Well mate, i can't relate to any of that as I've not failed at any of them. That said I've not succeeded either! ME warrior - My sister is a fellow warrior, so I know the score. And thanks for the website nod, I often wonder if anyone visits from...
by camus
Sat Apr 13, 2019 8:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Triffids
Replies: 7
Views: 897

Re: Triffids

(sorry to say this) sound a little childish to me and over emphatic Not at all. I might agree. I seem to find myself in a rut of breaking down language to it's simplest form and structure, i don't know why...well i do...I often find poetry unbearably pretentious these days, sometimes highly annoyin...
by camus
Thu Apr 11, 2019 1:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Perpetual Motion
Replies: 14
Views: 1986

Re: Perpetual Motion

I must say you have one of the most original voices i've read on here for a long while.

Are you young(ish) you seem very earnest in your replies!

Anyhow, a pleasure to read.

Cheers
C
by camus
Thu Apr 11, 2019 1:11 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Lycorine in the Living Room (revised)
Replies: 14
Views: 1465

Re: Lycorine in the Living Room

This poem has made me stop and try and work it out!

Initially i like the language and the intrigue, it reminds me of a good TV drama

I'll be back.
by camus
Thu Apr 11, 2019 12:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Triffids
Replies: 7
Views: 897

Triffids

I'm not smoking anymore so I'm slightly overweight but less than poor It's no fun of course vaping around like a demented horse lost in an icy wood It's not the same I can't relax I'm on tenterhooks I'm strung-up bled-out and faxed I'm a bad copy of myself. I'm now afraid of meat! Red is bad, white ...
by camus
Tue Nov 27, 2018 10:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Sandcastles
Replies: 11
Views: 1820

Re: Sandcastles

Thanks guys. Took on board various suggestions: But mostly ending the poem at a certain stage (suggestion by David) Q. How hard is it to cut out a serious amount of a poem? A. Very hard. BUT it made total sense. The mixture of sun and moon, the leaping, the revellers all became a little contrived an...
by camus
Sat Nov 24, 2018 11:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Sandcastles
Replies: 11
Views: 1820

Sandcastles

Revision 1 Sandcastles Are built to last a day at best History condensed - Summer somewhere remembered the siege of hill forts and outposts French inventions - Ours is now eight hours old several turrets, a hungry moat Annihilation is imminent - The sun is setting behind it We sit and watch, resple...
by camus
Wed Nov 21, 2018 1:13 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Man Out Of Time
Replies: 13
Views: 2027

Re: Man Out Of Time

Good heart wrenching stuff. I kinda wanted the refrain of "Here’s where I get it" to change at some point to "Here’s where I DON'T get it" fuelling the disparity between situations. Basically "Here’s where I get it" seems redundant and over used i think, unnecessary. First and last stanza would suff...
by camus
Wed Nov 21, 2018 12:36 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Geezer near Grasmere
Replies: 4
Views: 1098

Re: Geezer near Grasmere

Hopes may rise on the Grasmere
But Honey Pie, you're not safe here
So you run down to the safety of the town

If unsure, quote a relevant lyric.

I was unsure on the whole, but enjoyed the colloquial humour.

Nice One.
by camus
Sat Nov 03, 2018 9:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Peppers, Magnetic Island.
Replies: 14
Views: 2362

Re: Peppers, Magnetic Island.

No, I don't blame you.

I was thinking aloud, which should never be encouraged!
by camus
Sat Nov 03, 2018 1:11 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Peppers, Magnetic Island.
Replies: 14
Views: 2362

Re: Peppers, Magnetic Island.

Very good, but what is the point of it all? I find your poems luxuriant, brimming, and exciting, but ultimately (more often than not) pointless. Of course we each write poems for our own reasons, but surely there must be a point to writing poems beyond our own skill and insights, to convey something...