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by Suzanne
Tue Sep 15, 2015 6:26 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Discovering Resilience
Replies: 8
Views: 1409

Re: Discovering Resilience

I am glad i found a seemingly better title, thank you for coming back, Alan.

Thanks Stever, i am glad you picked up on the N's coming through something where resilience was needed.
Thanks for your thoughts.

Warmly,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Tue Sep 15, 2015 6:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Game Piece
Replies: 7
Views: 1211

Re: Game Piece

Thank you Alan and Seth.
Just a little poem. I appreciate tge replies.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Mon Sep 14, 2015 6:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Madonna and Child
Replies: 7
Views: 1062

Re: Madonna and Child

This is wonderful.
You are very enjoyable to read.

I am just flying past but wanted to make sure you know...
You have a beautiful talent.

I will come back soon.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Sat Sep 12, 2015 10:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Discovering Resilience
Replies: 8
Views: 1409

Re: Discovering Resilience

And so I changed it.

Hmmm... ?
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Fri Sep 11, 2015 1:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The illusion of choice
Replies: 11
Views: 1752

The illusion of choice

The illusion of choice Little pebbles nest in grooves on my front steps, discarded by summer shoes before reaching the threshold of my house. I wonder if any of them are disappointed they didn't make it inside. And how long I will let them be still before sweeping them back into the yard. We drove t...
by Suzanne
Fri Sep 11, 2015 12:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Finding Maria (Revision 2)
Replies: 10
Views: 1606

Re: Finding Maria (Tweaks)

Hi. It is like a mini theatre production! The tweak reads a bit smoother, i think. As a poem, it has words that are not needed for impact. For that reason, it is more difficult to give a crit. As a prose poem, whatever exactly that is, it seems a pleasant and interesting narrative. I am wondering if...
by Suzanne
Fri Sep 11, 2015 10:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A new path
Replies: 4
Views: 790

Re: A new path

Hi, The title works well though not as creative as you could be. I would lose one of the "soil"s. And would change sky, clouds is better. Sky is not a more creative option, it is just more awkward. I like the idea of this. Recently saw a meme that said: have the courage to walk away from things that...
by Suzanne
Fri Sep 11, 2015 10:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Out among nettles
Replies: 2
Views: 561

Re: Out among nettles

Hi,

You must mean calves, right?


I followed to the end.
Imagined a park scene with various people in various activities but
the birthday threw me of track. ?


I liked the simplicity but not sure what it is about.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Fri Sep 11, 2015 10:12 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Poets' Graves meet-up 2016
Replies: 110
Views: 47134

Re: Poets' Graves meet-up 2016

Manchester weekend in april?
by Suzanne
Wed Sep 09, 2015 8:56 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Discovering Resilience
Replies: 8
Views: 1409

Re: The importance of breathing room

Thank you for the time, Alan.
I will give some thought to any "extra" words.

I think you've missed my point though.
This is the mystery of communication sometimes.
The title plays a big role in the message of the poem.

Thank you,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Tue Sep 08, 2015 8:09 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Game Piece
Replies: 7
Views: 1211

Re: Game Piece

Good point, i will think about that ray. Thanks.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Tue Sep 08, 2015 8:07 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hello everyone
Replies: 3
Views: 3095

Re: Hello everyone

Great! Welcome!

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Tue Sep 08, 2015 8:05 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Discovering Resilience
Replies: 8
Views: 1409

Discovering Resilience

Discovering Resilience It is a new thing to allow myself to simply rest, to think, to gaze, occasionally, out my window at the tree with its missing limb. The branch was low on its trunk but too high to reach without a ladder. It held a bird feeder until its accident, zebra colored sunflower seeds a...
by Suzanne
Mon Sep 07, 2015 9:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Game Piece
Replies: 7
Views: 1211

Re: Game Piece

What a great crit. Good insights.
Thank you.
I have edited.

Warmly,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Sun Sep 06, 2015 4:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Game Piece
Replies: 7
Views: 1211

Game Piece

Game Piece She'd live as a cardboard cutout, brass fastener at the elbow and base of the neck- to tip her head slightly as if listening. She'd smile. She'd adjust her position with the feminine precision, secured in the mold she was given when the game began. Then, she'd simply stand and watch herse...
by Suzanne
Sun Sep 06, 2015 4:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Common Reader
Replies: 7
Views: 1293

Re: The Common Reader

Hmmmmm.
Love the last line.

Pretty much would enjoy a conversation with the man, if it excluded rugby and politians.

This made me smile.

Thanks.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Sun Sep 06, 2015 4:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I return to Venice
Replies: 8
Views: 1696

Re: I return to Venice

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wanted to add that the line with the uniformed boys, didn't the reader already see the hotel scene and conclude they were porters? I thought it pretty clear. But should i change it to poters? Opinions?
by Suzanne
Sun Sep 06, 2015 4:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stay (was 'September Song') — Revision 2
Replies: 14
Views: 1872

Re: September Song — Revision 1

Hi, I really enjoyed the meter. I think you've done a splendid job. I've bedn watching the replies and think the edit is better than the first. The last two lines are the hardest to tie together. But they are not bad, just not as naturally smooth as the previous. "Bit of fear" doesnt seem right and ...
by Suzanne
Sun Sep 06, 2015 12:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I return to Venice
Replies: 8
Views: 1696

Re: I return to Venice

Thank you for the replies. Ray, i nearly always see your point to your suggestions and i am tempted to follow your lead in seconds. This is alarming! Isn't it? Lol. It is wonderful and helpful, that is for sure. Thank you. I will put pensione in italics using yours and stever's suggestion. I dislike...
by Suzanne
Thu Sep 03, 2015 8:44 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I return to Venice
Replies: 8
Views: 1696

Re: I return to Venice

Thank you Alan.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Wed Sep 02, 2015 7:51 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I return to Venice
Replies: 8
Views: 1696

I return to Venice

I return to Venice There is a little singing in the cafe below my hotel window, a table filled with happiness a holiday brings. Closing my eyes, I listen to the scene, imagine the number of days it has repeated in my absence. And I remember you laughing behind glass doors, too many beveled edges, wa...
by Suzanne
Wed Sep 02, 2015 7:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Venezia, Mia Amore (Revision 4 shortened version)
Replies: 13
Views: 1861

Re: Venezia, Mia Amore (Revision 3.5)

Hi JJ, The poet's love for Venice is clear! I think the poem is more like prose in the the sentences, word structure as it adds the extra wording for grammatical fludity. If you laid it all out in a paragraph form, no one would say, Oh! This is more like a poem! My opinion is that as a free verse po...
by Suzanne
Wed Sep 02, 2015 7:30 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Who’s Cattle Now
Replies: 12
Views: 1704

Re: Who’s Cattle Now

I enjoyed the first two lines best. The rest feels strained to make a point, which is not to say that is bad.... I just liked the first lines best. This must have looped in your mind a while before you completed it. It is a pleasant thing sometimes to have metered phrasing doing loops. Thanks for th...
by Suzanne
Wed Sep 02, 2015 7:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tuktoyaktuk
Replies: 8
Views: 1263

Re: Tuktoyaktuk

Very very interesting. I like the repeat of her location. Really enjoyed the caribou images. There would be steam rising from their breath, I think. You have captured the chill and white bones, very well. There is something about the last few lines. She heard them, made a quick.... I think a word co...
by Suzanne
Wed Aug 26, 2015 5:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sock Cantrip
Replies: 11
Views: 1706

Re: Sock Cantrip

Oh, that was a lovely read.

Socks are a favorite theme for me.
Nice and light hearted, Seth.

Thanks,
Suzanne