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by Suzanne
Wed Dec 28, 2016 5:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 2705

Re: Farther Than it Looks

Yes, no comments at all says something. And other meanings to " free" also crossed my mind. I said dying because I have an experience of a woman saying that often before she died. We readers understand through our experiences, of course. Same with companionship. To be lead into a more specific concl...
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 27, 2016 8:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: black and white (revised again)
Replies: 23
Views: 3523

Re: and yet in sweeter climes

Hi,

It seems to say that in sweeter climes, a red woolly hat would be perfect. But not in this snowy place. ?
I am envious of the snowy landscape with just one black twig. We have all twigs exposed. Rode my bike yesterday. Weird weather.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 27, 2016 8:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 2705

Re: Farther Than it Looks

Hi, I am very fond of brevity. for me, it is admirable to have the ability to stimulate the reader's imagination with so few words. The poem, though, seems to have a rock in its shoe as it has been read but no clear comments made, yet? Maybe? I read it is either about feeling death on the horizon, w...
by Suzanne
Fri Dec 23, 2016 7:56 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies
Replies: 12
Views: 2291

Re: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies

Thank you, Ian. I appreciate it and am encouraged.
Poetry is such a workout for the rusty. Its quite time consuming, in a good way, mostly.

Thanks,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Fri Dec 23, 2016 7:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Over My Shoulder
Replies: 17
Views: 2448

Re: Over My Shoulder

Great. I like being nice. Post more poems.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Thu Dec 22, 2016 2:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Over My Shoulder
Replies: 17
Views: 2448

Re: Over My Shoulder

My thoughts are that poet writes to express an idea, feeling or thought and, of course, wants to be understood by an audience. Not the entire world audience but their selected audience. There is a dilemma when what was written i understood differently than what was intended. I have a hard time seein...
by Suzanne
Thu Dec 22, 2016 7:35 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Shoes of a Recluse
Replies: 10
Views: 3161

Re: Shoes of a Recluse

Thank you. The clock means a lot to me. It has a slight vibration in one chime so I stopped winding it a few years ago. 500€ to fix it! I didn't. Took it out recently and began winding it again. Yesterday I just added oil in any place I thought OK. I love its presence in my home. Happy you connected...
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 4:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Over My Shoulder
Replies: 17
Views: 2448

Re: Over My Shoulder

Sixty-eight degrees, I generally try to read poems only when first critiquing, avoiding what others may have said. That gives me a more honest response, I think. But now this time I scanned through and saw that you volunteered that the she is your imagined muse. I didn't pick that up at all anywhere...
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 4:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Long Haul
Replies: 8
Views: 1263

Re: The Long Haul

I have the feeling of doing a back handspring and landing with my arms outstretched above my head.

Have i landed on my feet or will I faulter? Micro seconds tick by.....
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 4:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Long Haul
Replies: 8
Views: 1263

Re: Eve 2016

Ian and 68,

This feedback has been very insightful.
I will edit using your comments. Thank you.
And Mac...

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 10:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Shoes of a Recluse
Replies: 10
Views: 3161

Re: Losing Ankle Bracelets

Ros! yes, DUH... I forgot one big key to the poem, DUH!!

Thanks, I am awful with titles. Lucky am I with a good one. I changed it.
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 10:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Shoes of a Recluse
Replies: 10
Views: 3161

Shoes of a Recluse

Shoes of a Recluse Distracted by my never worn shoes, I contemplate DIY shelving. Heels, flats, dressy, casual, boots, sandals, all black, all inviting me to attend. To go to the ball. Be in seen in a crowd. Twirl in the sunshine in the garden of a lover. Slip on a “little black dress” and become ar...
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 9:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Abandoned Agricultural Machinery, No.17 (v2)
Replies: 10
Views: 1680

Re: Abandoned Agricultural Machinery, No.17

Thistle reapers lost in the enemy's embrace


I love it. Purple stiff thistles and drab green enemies. Loads of impact on me.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 9:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Admittance of Doubt (was "Things")
Replies: 11
Views: 1592

Re: Admittance of Doubt (was "Things")

K-j, this is so true. So humanly common to how we let things creep in and become almost entities to acknowledge on our walks or in the inbetween moments. You have captured that well. I am working on being more productive in my crits and so I offer you this little thing. What you do with it is up to ...
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 9:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Not Friends (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 1588

Re: Not Friends

A day upon the graph, she pulls the arc which joins her vertex to the tall and mad haired man who daily brings milk to the door. Ok, I am back. I wanted to say that I loved this opening a lot. It is very sensually charged. I like that he is mad haired. professional, their private lives devoided of l...
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 9:29 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Over My Shoulder
Replies: 17
Views: 2448

Re: Over My Shoulder

This is so very interesting. I am nodding my head in thought, yep. hmmm..
I am going to think about it and come back.

Do you have a name that can be used here, 68degrees? or are you firm on the number? Just asking.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 21, 2016 9:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Long Haul
Replies: 8
Views: 1263

Re: Not in Eden lost

Thank you, Mac. I can see what you mean and will ponder it. It has been insightful and challenging, actually. I will think if I want to change the tone into one that is more direct. Thanks. Lou, thank you. Yes, I know I don't want Not lost in Eden but know it is not quite right. I thought about putt...
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 20, 2016 4:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies
Replies: 12
Views: 2291

Re: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies

You should have seen that squirrel, he was a rascal. Made me cranky.
I'll keep it as it is. I think it adds to the whole, lol, doesn't matter that I didn't see it initially.

A reader makes a poem a poem and not just words in a poet's head. Thanks, Ros.
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 20, 2016 4:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Comfy Chair
Replies: 11
Views: 1451

Re: The Comfy Chair

lol.

So, we let it rest.
Fresh eyes, read it with fresh eyes, Ian... later... later....
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 20, 2016 3:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Comfy Chair
Replies: 11
Views: 1451

Re: The Comfy Chair

Smiling...

ok, Ian. How about that then?
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 20, 2016 1:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Long Haul
Replies: 8
Views: 1263

The Long Haul

The Long Haul Distant asphalt reflects light when wet but it’s still mostly monochrome. Black, grey, lusterless silver, tedium sets in when hoping for “a riot of flowers” or bling. I know this junction, we’ve gone through it about a million or thirty times. It looks like mud mixed with the grass of ...
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 20, 2016 1:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Not Friends (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 1588

Re: Not Friends

I like it and it didn't feel like two poems. I thought it was an understated wise warning to the reader. I liked the maths references as it set the logical conclusion up very well. You could slip a bit of soap opera drama in slyly further up, plant it before the end bloom. Devoided trips the flow li...
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 20, 2016 5:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Comfy Chair
Replies: 11
Views: 1451

Re: Waiting for a Cape

Well, ok, I see this has failed to convey what I intended. I accpet that. I believe the new title sent the thing off in a direction I didn't anticipate. Yes, I imagined a superhero but not a being. I have to either make it is someone or keep it a something. It was written as an it. I will let this g...
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 20, 2016 5:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies
Replies: 12
Views: 2291

Re: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies

Thank you, Ros. I am very glad you noticed the title. Discovering the title made me laugh! Poetry is like doing a jigsaw puzzle. I didn't see the double meaning of the last line. I am not so sure I like it. I was not intending to have a "right to my body" thing going on. Yet, there it is... With you...
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 20, 2016 5:13 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: And this is where I am standing (revision3)
Replies: 33
Views: 3451

Re: And this is where I am standing (revision)

You, mac, are NOT rusty. This is a nice smooth poem like a snapshot. You've captured the moment well. I had to search my memories to find a canal and a bridge. When I looked at the photo, my first thought was, Oh! a lovely stone bridge! Perhaps you could mention the stone? Just a thought. And so ver...