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by BenJohnson
Wed Feb 01, 2012 9:57 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Ink, Sweat and Tears
Replies: 21
Views: 3340

Re: Ink, Sweat and Tears

Well done Nash.
by BenJohnson
Thu Jan 05, 2012 3:56 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Small stones: an exercise for January
Replies: 73
Views: 22433

Re: Small stones: an exercise for January

A sea gull and a sea gull
one of them dancing
for worms
by BenJohnson
Wed Jan 04, 2012 9:37 am
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Small stones: an exercise for January
Replies: 73
Views: 22433

Re: Small stones: an exercise for January

I am used to worms being shorter and more full of colour from the flesh coloured band wrapped around its throat like an elastoplast to the end of its tail this worm is like a sock that has stretched in the wash dragged down by the weight of water it is so full of rain it is almost the colour of rain...
by BenJohnson
Tue Jan 03, 2012 8:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Feast of Fools
Replies: 10
Views: 1034

Re: Feast of Fools

Quite seamless, I've tried to work out which bits were David and which were Nicky and ended up giving up and just enjoying it as a whole piece, great job both of you.
by BenJohnson
Mon Jan 02, 2012 5:08 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Small stones: an exercise for January
Replies: 73
Views: 22433

Re: Small stones: an exercise for January

The docks I dug two feet under
have sailed beneath the soil
through the whole of winter
they slide tubes among the void
to peer through waves of mud,
before rising from the black
depths and slowly they are undug
to unfurl their great green flags
by BenJohnson
Sun Jan 01, 2012 1:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stone Face
Replies: 13
Views: 884

Re: Stone Face

As a big Keaton fan this poem works for me really well, it is fun to pick out the references to key moments from his movies, very true to the man.
by BenJohnson
Sun Jan 01, 2012 11:35 am
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Small stones: an exercise for January
Replies: 73
Views: 22433

Re: Small stones: an exercise for January

Sky the colour of a dirty duvet
pulled over our heads
even the light is stiffled
by BenJohnson
Sat Dec 31, 2011 9:30 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: The illustrated wormwood
Replies: 6
Views: 1042

Re: The illustrated wormwood

Hope to get a Kindle soon so I'll add this to my to buy list. Does it render okay Delph? I heard Kindle has a few issues with poetry.
by BenJohnson
Sat Dec 31, 2011 1:15 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hello
Replies: 13
Views: 3120

Re: Hello

Welcome albatross.
by BenJohnson
Sat Dec 31, 2011 1:13 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hello ALL
Replies: 3
Views: 2219

Re: Hello ALL

Welcome to Poets' Graves
by BenJohnson
Sat Dec 31, 2011 1:12 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Small stones: an exercise for January
Replies: 73
Views: 22433

Re: Small stones: an exercise for January

Buds like corn unpopped,
await the growing heat
for their fusillades of green
to rattle against the sky;
at which point
we will jump and point,
Look, Look at the leaves.
by BenJohnson
Sat Dec 31, 2011 12:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: PUSHING BUTTONS
Replies: 5
Views: 699

Re: PUSHING TUTOR BUTTONS

An amazingly good response from the pair of you, well done.
by BenJohnson
Sun Dec 18, 2011 12:40 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Question re Other Poetry
Replies: 8
Views: 1275

Re: Question re Other Poetry

Although I had a piece that didn't get in he did let me know as Brian says he is very decent about letting you know but it sometimes seems to take forever to hear back.
by BenJohnson
Sun Dec 18, 2011 12:39 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Envoi
Replies: 14
Views: 1641

Re: Envoi

I had totally forgotten this, my copy on Envoi dropped through the door yesterday and halfway through reading it I thought I know this poem :D
by BenJohnson
Mon Dec 05, 2011 8:15 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Keeper
Replies: 24
Views: 1795

Re: The Keeper

From the comments it looks like you have trimmed out a harp, seems a shame since I would assume this was about a young David and the harp was part of the story.
by BenJohnson
Sun Dec 04, 2011 10:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Preparations -Edit
Replies: 12
Views: 690

Re: The Preparations -Edit

The interesting twist about this poem is that most of these "she"s are not the same person. There are many women in this poem. I was not sure how to convey that with simplicity or if it mattered. What do you think? Did you sense that or was it completely lost? My original thought was that there was...
by BenJohnson
Sun Dec 04, 2011 10:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Preparations -Edit
Replies: 12
Views: 690

Re: The Preparations -Edit

The interesting twist about this poem is that most of these "she"s are not the same person. There are many women in this poem. I was not sure how to convey that with simplicity or if it mattered. What do you think? Did you sense that or was it completely lost? My original thought was that there was...
by BenJohnson
Sat Dec 03, 2011 5:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The old croft house nearby on a frosty day
Replies: 18
Views: 1585

Re: The old croft house nearby on a frosty day

The same scene as Frost from a different angle?
by BenJohnson
Fri Dec 02, 2011 6:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Preparations -Edit
Replies: 12
Views: 690

Re: The Preparations

One too many matters for me at the start 'is the heart of all matters' would that work without loss of meaning. I'd also drop the 'and' in the final line. I had a slight hiccup reading these two lines 'They'll be fully formed by Christmas Eve/then removed until next year.' but that might be my readi...
by BenJohnson
Fri Dec 02, 2011 9:51 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Snakeskin
Replies: 11
Views: 1413

Re: Snakeskin

Congratulations on Snakeskin Kris, shame about the Journal at least their reply was better than the one I got from Magma which suggested I go an join a writing/critique group to learn more about poetry. Know any good critique groups?
by BenJohnson
Fri Dec 02, 2011 9:48 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hello
Replies: 4
Views: 2274

Re: Hello

Welcome GRB, that is indeed the best name from the Narnia series.
by BenJohnson
Fri Dec 02, 2011 9:47 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: New
Replies: 6
Views: 3443

Re: New

Welcome to PG.
by BenJohnson
Fri Dec 02, 2011 9:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (Redrafted) Not Moon Apart
Replies: 20
Views: 1368

Re: Two Not Moon Apart

Congratulations on surviving PG's warm welcome and continuing to post :D A Welsh form written in English and based in the Hebrides is quite a mix. You've played quite loosely with the syllable count and is it me or am I missing some/most of the internal rhymes? The result works though as stated by m...
by BenJohnson
Fri Dec 02, 2011 9:12 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Back Woods
Replies: 22
Views: 2049

Re: Back Woods

Thanks Calico far from wintry scene at the moment, sunshine pouring through the window this morning. This was another prompt poem using some of the words from Robert Frost's Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening, not surprising it is wintry as a result. I agree the middle section is pretty crap and n...
by BenJohnson
Thu Dec 01, 2011 9:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Back Woods
Replies: 22
Views: 2049

Back Woods

This year the snow has frozen sound itself, it's harnessed hurricanes to heap against the house and climbed rough white washed walls to peer though windows watching as we add constraints of clothing. Go and ask the woods for heat as poplars screech and crack beneath the weight. Go ask the lake for f...