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by BenJohnson
Mon Apr 23, 2012 9:28 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: PG Anthology?
Replies: 95
Views: 13492

Re: PG Anthology?

Obviously not closely enough! Where are these decisions? Fair enough though, just wondering? April 12th in the thread :) at which stage only a handful of people had offered to help out. Nash deferred to Ian leaving the final selection as Brian,Ian,Ros and Mic. Personally I feel the four of them hav...
by BenJohnson
Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Metamorphosis - V2
Replies: 22
Views: 1379

Re: Metamorphosis

Thanks to everyone for their replies here, I have made a series of minor edits which reflect the suggestions here, but you have all helped me realise that the this needs a lot more attention. @Nash thanks for the pointers in Creation or course Boris (spelt Karloff :oops: ) was the monster and didn't...
by BenJohnson
Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Local History Facebook Group
Replies: 16
Views: 1048

Re: A Local History Facebook Group

Each time I re-read this Ray I find myself smiling at the ending
What do you think of the estate these days?

I lived at 36 Norrington Road. Does anyone remember me?

It’s alright apart from the dog shit.

There isn’t a 36 Norrington Road.
Which perfectly sums up the average Internet chat.
by BenJohnson
Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sewer
Replies: 14
Views: 877

Re: Sewer

I like the idea of 'while we fulfil/the roles and stations granted us by fate,/the effluent and slop of serf and lord/commingles democratically', the closest thing to democracy is a sewer :D I'm not entirely sure where the ending is trying to take me though, I like the repetition of the opening, but...
by BenJohnson
Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dan yr Ogof Caves
Replies: 5
Views: 435

Re: Dan yr Ogof Caves

Sorry k.j. but you are wrong about the egg shells. They are porous which was part of the salmonella scare in this country many years ago. http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index ... 226AArEztZ
by BenJohnson
Fri Apr 20, 2012 9:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Spring of Words
Replies: 8
Views: 600

Re: Spring of Words

Simple (perhaps deceptively so) and thoughtful. I agree you could lose the two lines mentioned without any apparent lose of meaning and certainly losing the first will remove the two syllable bump at the start. Small bones to pick though in an enjoyable poem.
by BenJohnson
Fri Apr 20, 2012 9:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dan yr Ogof Caves
Replies: 5
Views: 435

Re: Dan yr Ogof Caves

I don't know these particular caves but you provide a striking image image here. You build up to quite a crescendo by the middle which appears to calm down soon after, I still trying to fit The hunger
 of the long gone explorer's head greased

 with a tracery of hair oil. into the overall picture, b...
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 19, 2012 9:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Watermarks- tweaks
Replies: 12
Views: 807

Re: Dream stains

It's a bit of an unfortunate title... Unfortunately I had the same thought each time I saw this :D, a good decision to change Suzanne. I find 'Love oozed/a milky loneliness' a bit vague as I can't picture a milky loneliness or any loneliness related to milk. 'attempt to get satiated/from the residu...
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 19, 2012 7:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Evolutionarily oblique
Replies: 18
Views: 1195

Re: Evolutionarily oblique

Like some of the others the first verse throws me, it took a few readings to twig that you were writing about seals, only the last line in verse one points clearly enough for me. Verse two is much easier to read and understand.
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 19, 2012 4:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Local History Facebook Group
Replies: 16
Views: 1048

Re: A Local History Facebook Group

Reads a lot like found poetry, I can't decide if it is or just created to resemble it. I don't get the feeling that there is anything deeper than what I am reading on the surface or that I have progressed in anyway by the end. In which case this is probably art mirroring life, but a little too exact...
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 19, 2012 7:25 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Trap of Death
Replies: 7
Views: 803

Re: Trap of Death

Hi Ron,

For me the poem ends here 'as she waits…', you have built up a certain mystery in the first two verse and revealed it at this point, anything beyond that feels like food for another poem.
by BenJohnson
Wed Apr 18, 2012 1:20 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Pentametron
Replies: 1
Views: 445

Pentametron

An interesting idea here, this site scans Twitter feeds for tweets that are in perfect IP then builds sonnets out of them. Lots of crap, but the odd startling lines. http://www.pentametron.com/
by BenJohnson
Wed Apr 18, 2012 12:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Granger dreams he is Lyme
Replies: 7
Views: 1029

Granger dreams he is Lyme

Granger dreams he is Lyme I am the rocky ledge, blue lias clay, steeply sloping roads and curving cobb. Come and fritter coins in my arcade or walk my promenade in April rain. I am the spot where they question God and chip their fossils from blue lias clay. They hunt my face for dinosaurs and weigh ...
by BenJohnson
Tue Apr 17, 2012 7:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Fiddles
Replies: 40
Views: 2790

Re: Fiddles

I keep coming back to this David just to enjoy the execution. You have provided us with a complete thought that is a stepping stone to a whole host of other thoughts. I started thinking technically that a violin is a fiddle, the difference in the perception of it, but of course you already acknowled...
by BenJohnson
Sat Apr 14, 2012 12:33 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Anyone suffering from Portentous Hush?
Replies: 4
Views: 1767

Re: Anyone suffering from Portentous Hush?

It all sounds pretty sour to me. There have always been major poets, minor poets and a mass of mediocre poets in every age. Good poetry survives and poor fades away and I doubt that will change in the Internet age. I wonder if this outburst is because he feels that his own poetry is getting 'buried'...
by BenJohnson
Fri Apr 13, 2012 10:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Zen Calvinism in the Farmyard
Replies: 14
Views: 1027

Re: Zen Calvinism in the Farmyard

Good to read one of your's again Elphin and of your usual high standard. I don't recognise the Maccraig poem so will have to hunt it down after this. The first half is great with the hidden rhymes and other sonics binding it together. The second half felt a little looser, but that seemed at ease wit...
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 12, 2012 10:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Metamorphosis - V2
Replies: 22
Views: 1379

Re: Metamorphosis

Any pointers on where the Eliot section could be tightened?
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 12, 2012 7:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Metamorphosis - V2
Replies: 22
Views: 1379

Re: Metamorphosis

Yikes, definitely corpses. I don't remember dogs digging up trees. I don't suppose I can get away with moving/proven either. I only count one stress in 'finally' which gives me four beats to a line, unless I'm hearing it wrong.
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 12, 2012 6:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Metamorphosis - V2
Replies: 22
Views: 1379

Metamorphosis - V2

Removed
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 12, 2012 6:10 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: The Rejection Generator
Replies: 1
Views: 405

Re: The Rejection Generator

Finally a great short-cut that saves me time and stamps. Great find Ros.
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 12, 2012 5:50 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: PG Anthology?
Replies: 95
Views: 13492

Re: PG Anthology?

If we aim for 70-80 poems to start with and see if that needs revising later on, depending on poem lengths, interest levels and so on.
by BenJohnson
Thu Apr 12, 2012 1:05 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: PG Anthology?
Replies: 95
Views: 13492

Re: PG Anthology?

I'm sorry I haven't been around for a couple of days, been moving around a lot on holiday for the past week and the last hotel wanted £20 for Internet connection :shock: I like all the names that have been throwing hats in the circle to act as editors. So as the first round of rejections no offence ...
by BenJohnson
Mon Apr 09, 2012 8:14 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: PG Anthology?
Replies: 95
Views: 13492

Re: PG Anthology?

Thanks Ros. I feel anyone who has posted in PG since it began should be allowed to submit poems to the anthology. Most who have come and gone are unlikely to. I don't know if an email to all members is feasible to alert those who come and go and are currently in the gone phase? If the interest is li...
by BenJohnson
Fri Apr 06, 2012 4:52 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: PG Anthology?
Replies: 95
Views: 13492

Re: PG Anthology?

I would say 4 maximum for editors or as Ros says it will get too difficult to reach an agreement. A 50/50 balance between genders would be good also. I'm happy not to be on the selection board and have a role later putting the book together and producing it. I'll give Kim and Lois a poke on Facebook...
by BenJohnson
Wed Apr 04, 2012 10:33 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: PG Anthology?
Replies: 95
Views: 13492

Re: PG Anthology?

I agree the Beg/Exp split is unnecessary. Probably controversial, but I would suggest that Beg poems are ineligible. I would think there would be some exceptions, there have been some long term members who have posted in Beginner's though their work is high quality. There will also be those on the ...