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by Ros
Sun Jul 16, 2017 9:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Starfish
Replies: 17
Views: 2162

Re: Starfish

in the oppressive unfairness of five, and heat, and wanting sleep. Your mother's helpless frustration; she couldn't control the weather, you can't turn over. is five a five-year old? If so, why can't they turn over? Slightly confused, assuming that's a human rather than the 5 referring to a starfish...
by Ros
Fri Jul 07, 2017 8:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Walk across Bladderwrack at Low Water Springs V2
Replies: 7
Views: 1027

Re: Walk across Bladderwrack at Low Water Springs V2

I didn't see that in l8 but flow tide is an odd phrase to my ear. V1 reads very well, v3 seems a little clumsy. If you knew she was a mermaid you'd hardly be popping her toe...
by Ros
Fri Jul 07, 2017 8:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Palmer
Replies: 18
Views: 1995

Re: Palmer

I like. Very effective
I want to know the secret sorrow too...

Ros
by Ros
Thu Jul 06, 2017 2:05 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: I Heart Europe : Edge Territories of the Vernacular (V2)
Replies: 9
Views: 1144

Re: I Heart Europe : Edge Territories of the Vernacular (V2)

Ah Europe! Ok, that's easier to see when not reading on a phone. Not sure of the overall message, though, but I'm getting somewhere.

Ros
by Ros
Wed Jul 05, 2017 4:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Epiphenomenal
Replies: 9
Views: 1164

Re: Epiphenomenal

This calls for a couple of lines in each verse to rhyme...
by Ros
Wed Jul 05, 2017 7:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Passing Through (ghazal) [revised]
Replies: 15
Views: 1644

Re: Passing Through (ghazal)

I like the last couplet a lot. I think perhaps alone is a hard word to use as the repeating one as its sense is pretty forthright and it's hard to do much new with it. Have you tried a ghazal using the rhyming pattern just before the repeating word? It adds a link between the couplets that otherwise...
by Ros
Mon Jul 03, 2017 1:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Other Luke's Gospel (v2)
Replies: 18
Views: 752

Re: The Other Luke's Gospel

Yes, very good. Perhaps try reading it out loud, to find the places where the rhythm doesn't flow quite as well as others? I like the way the ending neatly rounds it off.

Ros
by Ros
Mon Jul 03, 2017 12:56 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Snakeskin...David/Ray/Tristan/Other
Replies: 6
Views: 2237

Re: Snakeskin...David/Ray/Tristan/Other

Well done, all. PG takes over the world, slowly, slowly...
by Ros
Wed Jun 28, 2017 7:47 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: New Facebook group for PG!
Replies: 3
Views: 2686

New Facebook group for PG!

For those of a facebook persuasion, Seth has kindly created a new group

https://www.facebook.com/groups/453385751686917/

for general discussion, hilarity and promotion of the site. Please do join us!
by Ros
Wed Jun 28, 2017 6:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Strange Instructions (V2)
Replies: 7
Views: 1173

Re: Strange Instructions (V2)

I think I'm confusing loss of integrity with erosion of identity. Too much mud and not enough light. Thanks for your comments Ros. Julian Certainly erosion of identity fits much better with sickness/growing old. I can see this capturing that well, the sense of almost but not quite keeping a grip on...
by Ros
Wed Jun 28, 2017 6:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Eurococo?
Replies: 4
Views: 725

Re: Eurococo?

Bit lost on me, I'm afraid... can't work out who the danger men or the beta-burghers are. Or ants.

It feels like a good idea, though.

Ros
by Ros
Wed Jun 28, 2017 6:44 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Antiphon issue 21 live
Replies: 6
Views: 2335

Re: Antiphon issue 21 live

Antcliff wrote:
David wrote:Jock Stein! No way! I haven't been so excited since Mac appeared in a mag along with J Milton.
I hear Brian Clough has a new collection of sonnets coming out.
Preparing for the big football issue.
by Ros
Wed Jun 28, 2017 1:22 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Antiphon issue 21 live
Replies: 6
Views: 2335

Antiphon issue 21 live

Here.

http://antiphon.org.uk/wordpress/

Good poetry. Recordings. Reviews. etc.

Ros
by Ros
Tue Jun 27, 2017 1:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Path, Mist
Replies: 12
Views: 1423

Re: Path, Mist

Scary image.
I don't get the last line at all?

Ros
by Ros
Tue Jun 27, 2017 1:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Strange Instructions (V2)
Replies: 7
Views: 1173

Re: Strange Instructions (V2)

I'm not sure what it is we're supposed to have done, or not done But then we did it, done, or rather not quite maybe, and why we're more likely to when sick or old. Is loss of integrity more likely then? Can't see why. I liked the who diy vibe, and this But then we did it, done, or rather not quite ...
by Ros
Tue Jun 27, 2017 1:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Horseshoe Crabs
Replies: 6
Views: 1035

Re: Horseshoe Crabs

The article was amazing, wasn't it? I'm not so convinced you can link the blue blood as a metaphor of aristocrats/peasants - who are the aristocrats? Those doing the draining, or the crabs, which have the blue blood? How does the blood help defeat the peasants? I feel it's stretching the idea too fa...
by Ros
Tue Jun 20, 2017 8:11 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Another review of Drawing a Diagram
Replies: 1
Views: 772

Another review of Drawing a Diagram

Lovely review http://antiphon.org.uk/rb/?p=240 in The Interpreter's House. People are being very generous. If it persuades you to investigate a copy, this is the best route: http://antiphon.org.uk/rb/?p=148

Ros
by Ros
Thu Jun 15, 2017 3:30 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Rialto2
Replies: 9
Views: 3430

Re: Rialto2

Time for that collection....
by Ros
Thu Jun 15, 2017 3:30 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Review of Drawing a Diagram
Replies: 10
Views: 3447

Re: Review of Drawing a Diagram

Thanks Seth! I've seen the Orbis one, but not The Interpreter's House yet, so that will be interesting.

Ros
by Ros
Wed Jun 14, 2017 7:46 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Rialto2
Replies: 9
Views: 3430

Re: Rialto2

Well done Seth!

Never quite worked out what the Rialto is looking for, but you've nailed it!

Ros
by Ros
Sun Jun 11, 2017 9:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
Replies: 22
Views: 3132

Re: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)

Thanks, Ian. I was keeping the repeats of matter on purpose to make the language flatter, but perhaps it isn't necessary. We seem to see dark matter mainly through gravitational effects, but I'm finding it hard to make that a metaphor. Will experiment with your changes.

Ros
by Ros
Sun Jun 11, 2017 8:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
Replies: 22
Views: 3132

Re: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)

It's a thought, David. I agree it doesn't really fit in the poem, at least not without changing it too much. I'm still struggling with my dark matter, however.

Ros
by Ros
Sun Jun 11, 2017 3:28 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
Replies: 22
Views: 3132

Re: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)

Good thoughts, mac, thank you.

Ros
by Ros
Fri Jun 09, 2017 8:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Wabi-sabi
Replies: 5
Views: 862

Wabi-sabi

imperfect, impermanent, incomplete No wonder at a universe imperfect, reinvented daily in each individual mind, each star sketched out by neurochemicals and glands, dark matter coloured in by grey and now, it would appear, manipulated by our gut bacteria. Why would a world influenced by fermenting ...