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by Macavity
Fri May 22, 2020 1:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: What's the Point of Puddles? (v3)
Replies: 15
Views: 564

Re: What's the Point of Puddles? (v2)

And do you recall each apogee
when a cumulus of doubt
would scud across your cloudless sky
a fleeting, faint-heart, thought
Thumbs up on the sonics Not.

best

mac
by Macavity
Fri May 22, 2020 6:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Piper At The Gates Of Dawn (revised)
Replies: 7
Views: 375

Re: Birdies At The Gates Of Dawn (revised)

Thanks Tristan and Trevor. There seems a consensus on L9 so I've edited. sallow and sophist were there to convey unhealthy, indoor, abstract pursuits.

all the best

mac
by Macavity
Thu May 21, 2020 3:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Piper At The Gates Of Dawn (revised)
Replies: 7
Views: 375

Re: Birdies At The Gates Of Dawn

Thanks Not. I've capitalised, changed the to those, and tweaked the title. Will ponder a tad more about the concluding lines.

best

mac
by Macavity
Thu May 21, 2020 1:26 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Boubacar Traoré - Hona
Replies: 0
Views: 257

Boubacar Traoré - Hona

by Macavity
Thu May 21, 2020 1:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Piper At The Gates Of Dawn (revised)
Replies: 7
Views: 375

Piper At The Gates Of Dawn (revised)

revision True, back then, he was a sallow fellow - mind lost in mazes, burrowing for exams. The day he heard those birdies singing in the willow wood ended his studious ways. He let the sophist rest, breathed the songs within the trees, came to the river bank. A child at heart, and living in Englan...
by Macavity
Thu May 21, 2020 1:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Biscuits
Replies: 8
Views: 334

Re: Biscuits

Rich subject matter to play with Trevor, which biscuits you share, with whom, and those you keep for yourself or a special occasion may thread the piece together. best mac Have you ever studied the biscuit, pondered its ubiquity, its brisk forms and textures,..........I don't get that sense of 'quic...
by Macavity
Thu May 21, 2020 12:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: What's the Point of Puddles? (v3)
Replies: 15
Views: 564

Re: What's the Point of Puddles?

or just how good it felt

to feel your sole depart ?)
Yes, that feels better Not.
by Macavity
Thu May 21, 2020 11:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: What's the Point of Puddles? (v3)
Replies: 15
Views: 564

Re: What's the Point of Puddles?

Title caught my attention Not. But given it both wellies, decided to commit, not wavered, with excuses, around the edge of it? Like the fun psychology. or just how good it felt as you felt your sole depart You may want to revisit the repetition of felt I googled simoon and got a hot, dry, dust-laden...
by Macavity
Fri May 15, 2020 3:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: before Life was Art
Replies: 14
Views: 448

Re: before Life was Art

Enjoyed Lotus. I don't recall seeing the word 'oligarchy' in a poem. Heard the isolation in reminisced, the present lived in the past, the communication with self not others.

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mac
by Macavity
Wed May 13, 2020 1:07 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Poetry kit x1
Replies: 3
Views: 371

Re: Poetry kit x1

Congrats Tristan. Pleased to see you there and your poem (in its finalised version!)

all the best

mac
by Macavity
Sat May 09, 2020 6:05 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Spring in the Hollow
Replies: 7
Views: 431

Re: Spring in the Hollow

Hi Suzanne,
Very much enjoyed this gentle poem, particularly the periwinkle moths and forget-me-nots.

best

mac
by Macavity
Mon May 04, 2020 3:45 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Themed mag editions...
Replies: 110
Views: 39341

Re: Themed mag editions...

A heads up on one of my fav. subjects - food

https://www.flyonthewallpoetry.co.uk/magazine-guidelines
by Macavity
Mon May 04, 2020 8:11 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Without Explanation
Replies: 10
Views: 511

Re: Without Explanation

Like it a lot Not. I feel the title undermines the poem, though I understand a more specific title closes meaning. Perhaps 'Open to Explanation', though again that invites a meaningless tag and really the poem works because the reader wants to interpret. I presume it was a big coat :D You need a ful...
by Macavity
Sat May 02, 2020 2:34 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Terakaft
Replies: 0
Views: 349

Terakaft

by Macavity
Sat May 02, 2020 11:37 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Mac in The Poetry Shed
Replies: 3
Views: 249

Re: Mac in The Poetry Shed

Thank you JJ. Pleased you enjoyed my painterly poem :D

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Sat May 02, 2020 8:38 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Mac in The Poetry Shed
Replies: 3
Views: 249

Re: Mac in The Poetry Shed

Thank you very much Tristan (and for the congrats on the poetrykit). As you know yourself, self-doubt is always a lingering shadow!

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Fri May 01, 2020 8:22 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Poetrykit
Replies: 6
Views: 201

Poetrykit

The Poetrykit are posting poems written during the coronvirus outbreak, here's mine...

https://www.poetrykit.org/py/00066.htm
by Macavity
Fri May 01, 2020 10:30 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: David, Ray & Myself all appearing in Snakeskin
Replies: 3
Views: 246

Re: David, Ray & Myself all appearing in Snakeskin

Congrats Ray, Tristan and David. All very different, all very much enjoyed.

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mac
by Macavity
Thu Apr 30, 2020 9:42 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Durdle Door (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 1463

Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Mrs Mac and I feel the figures are a tad tiny JJ. The island is definitely more an island.

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mac
by Macavity
Thu Apr 30, 2020 5:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Bouquet Garni (Was April)
Replies: 10
Views: 525

Re: April

I'm getting a mental block on that burning twenty pound note Luke :shock: Perhaps you could replace it with a poem :D Perhaps money is worthless in the situation, and desperation has forced the action. I once visited a Hindu temple and there were all kinds of offerings...including a bottle of Worces...
by Macavity
Wed Apr 29, 2020 12:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Vital Signs (v2)
Replies: 9
Views: 433

Re: Vital Signs

Enjoyed the write Not. it hits a few targets. of all the supermarkets who have been keeping me informed announce the end of rationing by email. Yes, definitely been an angle to advertise! the archaeological excavation Not sure about archaeological , takes me further back than childhood. I thought yo...
by Macavity
Tue Apr 28, 2020 2:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Promised Land (v4)
Replies: 29
Views: 1212

Re: The Promised Land (v3)

I think so. After all he is their elected mouth-piece.

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mac
by Macavity
Tue Apr 28, 2020 2:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dandelion (V4)
Replies: 11
Views: 509

Re: Dandelion (V4)

Thumbs up on v4. Telly, but I like the 'v' sound and verbs are more difficult to pitch.

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mac
by Macavity
Tue Apr 28, 2020 10:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Promised Land (v4)
Replies: 29
Views: 1212

Re: The Promised Land (v3)

Red Hatters everywhere whooped and wrawled
for they are patriots that do love a wall.
Just a thought
by Macavity
Tue Apr 28, 2020 8:36 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dandelion (V4)
Replies: 11
Views: 509

Re: Dandelion (V3)

hi Tristan, I found V3 too emphatic in the second couplet. I'm not sure do is too 'earthly' or just too ordinary a verb (whereas flatters delivers) No flower flatters as much when stretching out its petals. I’d like/love to bring/gift/give to you what this morning sun brings/gifts/gives. I liked the...