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by Macavity
Fri Aug 19, 2005 8:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: still waters
Replies: 4
Views: 659

still waters

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by Macavity
Thu Aug 18, 2005 8:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: FATHER OF MINE
Replies: 4
Views: 742

Entertaining Sean. I particularly liked the bit about the staff. 'and tell the judge to just get lost ' - perhaps a little limp?

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Thu Aug 18, 2005 8:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Unwritten
Replies: 6
Views: 990

Besides letters never convey that pause,
the hesitation between wet and dry cotton
like that opens up the space for the reader

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Tue Aug 16, 2005 9:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: .
Replies: 11
Views: 1570

Coral antlers scratch on the hull
Many pleasures, but I thought that one of the tastiest.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Tue Jul 05, 2005 12:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: leaves
Replies: 4
Views: 740

Thank you Arco, though a narrative is buried there too. :0)

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Fri Jul 01, 2005 6:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Summer Days Revisited
Replies: 2
Views: 560

Enjoyed the sonnet Caleb. 'honeyed copper' is a lovely phrase.

best wishes

mac
by Macavity
Fri Jul 01, 2005 6:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: leaves
Replies: 4
Views: 740

Thanks for stopping by Caleb. The poem's a bit subterranean, centring around child and mother relations. Wrote it after watching Tarkovsky's 'Mirror'...notice someone else on the forum enjoys the Russian too.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Fri Jul 01, 2005 6:35 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tree
Replies: 3
Views: 594

Lots to enjoy about this Camus, not just because trees are a fav. subject.
I like the way the picture develops, the object is animated by its relation to other things.


flies
inspect incipient sores, burn their
shitty little feet, tumble into you
Great cameo of decay.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Wed Jun 29, 2005 7:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Lawns of Stately Homes
Replies: 6
Views: 876

This place bristles with
My weight upon its posture
Like the sense of affrontery.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Wed Jun 29, 2005 7:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Old Young Men
Replies: 13
Views: 2637

Enjoyed the poem Leslie, good last line.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Wed Jun 29, 2005 7:26 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: leaves
Replies: 4
Views: 740

leaves

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by Macavity
Tue Jun 14, 2005 2:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Old Tom Bombadil
Replies: 7
Views: 912

Loved the subject matter, 'myths have elusive habits' was nice, not sure about the line endings - prefer to see the focus on more interesting words there rather than 'the', 'and' etc.

cheers

mac :roll:
by Macavity
Mon Jun 13, 2005 11:35 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Kitsch
Replies: 3
Views: 630

hits the targets for me pseud
his metaphor keeps him
vague inside the cage
guilty, but I'm working on it :oops:


'his poem gyrates in a microwave'

visited a few of those places

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Mon Jun 06, 2005 11:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Comatose
Replies: 5
Views: 813

'Half mummified in future glass, is how I see them. You may say half sunk in sand. Both have potential.' Like these lines: projects the mind beyond the present, defines a moment, the confines of past. 'potential'/'half' sense of transience/change. 'mummified'/'future' - signifies end of life/preserv...
by Macavity
Mon Jun 06, 2005 11:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: leaves
Replies: 2
Views: 511

lol cam

'deep' moi?

just an eco poem - mainly

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Fri Jun 03, 2005 12:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Moonlight Warmth.
Replies: 6
Views: 980

Enjoyed your poem Thomas, the idea of doodling was a good, the mix of beginning line capitals and capitals for punctuation was a little confusing.

best wishes

mac :roll:
by Macavity
Fri Jun 03, 2005 12:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: leaves
Replies: 2
Views: 511

leaves

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by Macavity
Wed Jun 01, 2005 3:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Fenced In
Replies: 3
Views: 650

Enjoyed the poem. Liked the last line, telling me of lost childhood/lost ball.
'involving time and monetary cost' at first I thought this too telling, but the perception of 'time' and 'money' further defined age/experience.

cheers

mac :roll:
by Macavity
Mon May 30, 2005 8:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Suffocating In the Office Cubicle Part 2
Replies: 2
Views: 529

hi pseud

Repetitive forms are not my thing, but I enjoyed some of your diction choices ~ copper/oxidates, 'lawn decor' ~ science marches on...

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Sun May 29, 2005 5:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Ode to Sex Education
Replies: 5
Views: 1035

Even if the intention wasn't serious, still a good read Pseud. The tea/pubic hair will linger a while and the teacher's 'abnormal' silence was a good insight.

cheers

mac :roll:
by Macavity
Sun May 29, 2005 5:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Flowering
Replies: 4
Views: 704

hi Cam

Not sure if the self-reflective last line detracts: a flat footnote to explain intention.

'A pollen heavy bee penetrates the scene' - like this line, great active verb in there for me

cheers

mac :roll:
by Macavity
Sun May 29, 2005 4:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: summer breeze
Replies: 1
Views: 462

summer breeze

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by Macavity
Wed May 25, 2005 7:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Psychology (revised)
Replies: 6
Views: 951

This reminded me of some article I read in the National Geographic while waiting to see the dentist. The article was about the brain, how tumours/strokes damaged areas of the brain and prevented us functioning in certain ways. The joys of science, but then I thought 'Psychology' was just a pseudo sc...
by Macavity
Wed May 25, 2005 6:01 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: collecting sticks
Replies: 2
Views: 626

collecting sticks

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by Macavity
Mon May 23, 2005 7:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: they fell in love inthe back seat of a taxi
Replies: 5
Views: 890

hi bis

Enjoyed your poem. Liked the way it suggested mundane and then transferred to magical. Imaginative lines, but perhaps the 'jumble' structure distracts, asks a lot of the reader.

cheers

mac