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by Macavity
Mon Apr 20, 2020 9:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)
Replies: 22
Views: 907

Re: Visitors

There's a very good chance it might just morph into a simple nature poem.
And charming it would be too JJ. A lot to be said for some light in these times.

best

mac
by Macavity
Mon Apr 20, 2020 5:56 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

Having said that, I found myself taking the poem literally and failed to connect to any metaphor, intended or otherwise. That's fine JJ. I don't really have much ambition for the poem beyond the literal. I did intend that most of the poem was the adult voice, all of stanza 2, but your reply suggest...
by Macavity
Sun Apr 19, 2020 7:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)
Replies: 22
Views: 907

Re: Visitors

I enjoyed v1-v4 JJ, the chaotic energy of the sparrows, the contrasting purposeful goldfinch, the clarity of the individual, the confused crowd. Human parallels there, observing nature's lessons, the 'I' reflective and appreciative. Like some others, I find the concluding stanza is not needed, despi...
by Macavity
Sat Apr 18, 2020 2:10 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Streetcake
Replies: 7
Views: 527

Re: Streetcake

Thanks David. I've been enjoying Edward Thomas this week and just finished a collection of Katherine Mansfield's short stories and I'm now revisiting Kenneth Grahame's 'The Wind in the Willows' . Just an average Streetcake contributor :D It is a free magazine Perry: https://www.streetcakemagazine.co...
by Macavity
Sat Apr 18, 2020 1:55 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Culture Matters
Replies: 1
Views: 185

Re: Culture Matters

Congratulations Ray!
by Macavity
Fri Apr 17, 2020 11:05 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Streetcake
Replies: 7
Views: 527

Re: Streetcake

Thanks Tristan. Yes, Seth's poem ticked both humour and relevance.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Fri Apr 17, 2020 6:08 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Streetcake
Replies: 7
Views: 527

Streetcake

Seth and myself have poems in Streetcake Magazine

https://www.streetcakemagazine.com/issue.html

all the best

mac
by Macavity
Mon Apr 13, 2020 12:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

:lol: No, it's central that N. is curious enough to check out the 'facts'. half-truths is a clever title, rich in possibilities, but I prefer the simple open door for this poem. Subjective I know!

best

mac
by Macavity
Mon Apr 13, 2020 12:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Pinoakyo
Replies: 8
Views: 494

Re: Pinoakyo

This is the same SJ who insisted on going to the pub despite the PM saying orherwise!
by Macavity
Mon Apr 13, 2020 12:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

I think that would be a neat title Not., and made me smile, but it doesn't reconnect the adult to the child mind frame that was the poem's intent.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Mon Apr 13, 2020 12:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Pinoakyo
Replies: 8
Views: 494

Re: Pinoakyo

I'm picking up the invective Not., but not much else, perhaps because I don't get the title.

best

mac
by Macavity
Mon Apr 13, 2020 12:01 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

Thanks for those suggestions Perry, which I quite like, especially the line break for L3. I'll give them some thought, in particular the 'comfortable lie'.

best

mac
by Macavity
Sun Apr 12, 2020 6:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

My frequency is more shipping forecast on LW :D
David wrote:
Sun Apr 12, 2020 5:30 pm
Ah. Thanks for explaining that, Mac.

Still not getting that sub-text - and yet Tristan did, so there must be something there. Perhaps it's on a frequency that's just too high for me.

Cheers

David
by Macavity
Sun Apr 12, 2020 2:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

Thanks Not and David for returning. Still not swayed by the title :) seems to be more about reconnecting or rediscovering than curiosity. The awoken curiosity signifies the reconnection. You're welcome to shuffle those notes into the right order Not. :D But I confess I'm not really getting why the r...
by Macavity
Sun Apr 12, 2020 12:04 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

Cheers Tristan. Thanks for that nudge. Appreciated.

best

mac
by Macavity
Sat Apr 11, 2020 8:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

Fair enough Tristan. I've extended the poem to make the progression more explicit.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Sat Apr 11, 2020 6:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

hi Tristan, Yes, sometimes there is an expectation, but essentially the poem simply has N. revisiting the accuracy of what Gran said. N. is showing a curiosity that he had in childhood. best mac The title is rather the point of the poem and why N. comes to realise that there is some truth in what Gr...
by Macavity
Sat Apr 11, 2020 5:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious (revision)

Thanks Not. The title is rather the point of the poem and why N. comes to realise that there is some truth in what Gran says.

best

mac
by Macavity
Sat Apr 11, 2020 5:43 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: An exchange
Replies: 9
Views: 534

Re: Birds

hi Tony

Like how the birdie exchange shows their knowledge, contempt, for us.

I thought raptors were birds of prey?

best

mac
by Macavity
Sat Apr 11, 2020 5:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious

Thanks Tristan I’m going to guess the worm’s two severed halves are an image for your youth and adult life Pleased you picked up on that thread. I had a broken line in my head when writing this. I like the way your poems play with the limits of understandability in one direction or another. It’s an ...
by Macavity
Sat Apr 11, 2020 5:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Curious

Not keen on the title (cf. Heaney's Digging) 'fascinated' - there are too few details to make that claim convincing (could you just cut the word?) Thanks Not. Yes, I was asking for trouble with that patented title :) fascinated - probably trusting too much to the child fresh world context cheers mac
by Macavity
Sat Apr 11, 2020 5:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Re: Digging

David wrote:
Fri Apr 10, 2020 11:53 am
Macavity wrote:
Fri Apr 10, 2020 8:47 am
Later I read about the clitellum.
Me too. Back later.
Hopefully, not too unrewarding David :)

https://www.livescience.com/38371-two-worms-worm-cut-in-half.html
by Macavity
Fri Apr 10, 2020 8:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Curious (revision2)
Replies: 27
Views: 1224

Curious (revision2)

revision2 The one section twisting, the other still. I am a child again, with a trowel playing at science. Gran saying, it mends itself in time . That was her comfort myth. I toss the halves into the long grass, dismiss those garden voices, finish digging. Later, I read about the clitellum and mend...
by Macavity
Wed Apr 08, 2020 5:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Adios
Replies: 15
Views: 681

Re: Adios

hi Trevor The wind is more Irish than we could’ve imagined Yes, agree with Not, worth the entrance fee. All is simple, pared to the roots, I feel your habit of paring down length lines is a mode that fragments in a longer poem and disjoints the read. a tranquil child and a wife wrapped in thought at...
by Macavity
Tue Apr 07, 2020 2:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In Isolation (v6?)
Replies: 24
Views: 1126

Re: In Isolation (v6?)

v4 In Isolation I can hear my neighbours' breathing. How thin the walls are of our cells. I like this version too: the emphasis on how , the break on are , the progression from outside to inside in that realisation; the use of space for pause/distance, where thought comes into play; the vulnerabili...