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by David2
Thu Nov 07, 2013 7:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Another new mod!!
Replies: 4
Views: 341

Re: Another new mod!!

Seth has been assimilated.
by David2
Thu Nov 07, 2013 3:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: My wife is showing indications of being unwell
Replies: 10
Views: 717

Re: My wife is showing indications of being unwell

Pleiades wrote:I'm scratching my head at the grammar point but then I went to a comprehensive
Me too! Maybe that's the problem. My point was that in the present set-up the scavenger seems to relate back to the drift - not the person who's doing the drifting (or is adrift). No?
by David2
Thu Nov 07, 2013 3:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A challenge!!
Replies: 13
Views: 913

Re: A challenge!!

twoleftfeet wrote:Is there any way of posting anonymously?
That was definitely one of the best competitions we have had. Worth re-running?
by David2
Wed Nov 06, 2013 8:34 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Coach trip
Replies: 5
Views: 1998

Re: Coach trip

Hello, Mike. Enjoying your stuff. Now we won't have to call you Dizzy any more.
by David2
Wed Nov 06, 2013 8:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: On The Estate
Replies: 5
Views: 538

Re: On The Estate

Bleak, yes, and excellent. You've got me wondering what part of the world this estate is in, David. Unless it's an estate of mind. Still, very good.

Cheers

David
by David2
Wed Nov 06, 2013 8:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: My wife is showing indications of being unwell
Replies: 10
Views: 717

Re: My wife is showing indications of being unwell

Some very nice couplets in here, Richard. Grammatically, I'm having trouble with the scavenger and, like Ray, I was confused by that bauble. The mention of Switzerland is quite macabre. Great title. As Geoff says. There is something oddly worrying about such impersonal language. That's the intention...
by David2
Wed Nov 06, 2013 7:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The advice of Mrs Picasso
Replies: 10
Views: 967

Re: The advice of Mrs Picasso

It's the voice I'm having problems with, Dizzy. It's the bard-like incantation. Could it not be more conversational? A more conversational rewrite is something I'd like to see.

Cheers

David
by David2
Wed Nov 06, 2013 7:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Parallel Bars
Replies: 18
Views: 1163

Re: Parallel Bars

I really enjoy these moments of nostalgia (despite this one being tinged with sadness). Me too, although I'm not sure I noticed the sadness. Is that the ending? I thought it was brilliantly black and unexpected. Quite Saki-like. (k-j, correct me if I'm wrong.) I think it might be amusing to cause s...
by David2
Tue Nov 05, 2013 7:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A Joy Forever (challenge)
Replies: 10
Views: 755

Re: A Joy Forever (challenge)

I have to say that by the time I got through this, the last thing I was thinking of was Keats, your title aside. It does have some of Blake's mad epic sweep, though. I note, with interest , the enthusiasm of some of my fellow commenters, but I'm afraid I can't share it. Maybe next time? Cheers David
by David2
Tue Nov 05, 2013 6:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: stairs talk man (challenge)
Replies: 19
Views: 1289

Re: stairs talk man (challenge)

Great fun, but my favourites are the first two lines, just because by finishing with single syllables you avoid that overwhelming bloody Hiawatha rhythm. (Have we had this conversation before?)

Cheers

David
by David2
Mon Nov 04, 2013 10:05 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Suits and Dance Moves
Replies: 17
Views: 4614

Re: Suits and Dance Moves

Or a PG dance trope.
by David2
Mon Nov 04, 2013 7:44 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Suits and Dance Moves
Replies: 17
Views: 4614

Re: Suits and Dance Moves

Midnight Train to Georgia. Goosebumps.
by David2
Mon Nov 04, 2013 7:33 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Suits and Dance Moves
Replies: 17
Views: 4614

Re: Suits and Dance Moves

Trammpsss ...

by David2
Mon Nov 04, 2013 6:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Homage to Stevie (challenge)
Replies: 9
Views: 894

Re: Homage to Stevie (challenge)

Oddly like the red wheelbarrow poem, I think. Intentionally?

Cheers

David
by David2
Mon Nov 04, 2013 1:26 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Suits and Dance Moves
Replies: 17
Views: 4614

Re: Suits and Dance Moves

Fantastic.
by David2
Sun Nov 03, 2013 8:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A poem rote (Challenge)
Replies: 17
Views: 1132

Re: A poem rote (Challenge)

KenL wrote:David2 wrote:
I was so hoping this was going to be a dog poem.

I'm not sure I follow you, old chap..
KenL. Kennel? Obviously not!
by David2
Sun Nov 03, 2013 8:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A poem rote (Challenge)
Replies: 17
Views: 1132

Re: A poem rote (Challenge)

I was so hoping this was going to be a dog poem.
by David2
Sun Nov 03, 2013 6:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: And when we were sat in the Odeon -revised
Replies: 13
Views: 937

Re: And when we were sat in the Odeon

David - Remember To Leave Reality At Home was part of a trailer for a film. I become penguin whenever I write about the foster children. It's not entirely paranoia, strange things have happened. Agh! You've said that before. Sorry, I forgot. I thought that might have been from a trailer, but I didn...
by David2
Sat Nov 02, 2013 7:33 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: The god of war
Replies: 1
Views: 764

Re: The god of war

It does look very CGI-like. Doesn't it?
by David2
Sat Nov 02, 2013 7:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Retitled: Caliban on Oxford Street
Replies: 29
Views: 1818

Re: Retitled: Caliban on Oxford Street

Thanks, Seth. That may be a very good point. And, now I no longer have my "full of noises" line, the argument for keeping C is diminished.

He only appeared in the first place because you wanted me to make the title more interesting! I think I let the title take over the poem.

Cheers

David
by David2
Sat Nov 02, 2013 12:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Our old alderman
Replies: 12
Views: 822

Re: Our old alderman

Antcliff wrote:This wins the first Groucho Marx Elaborate Description of Movement Award...bravo.
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Cool!
by David2
Sat Nov 02, 2013 12:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Absinthe Drinker (1902)
Replies: 10
Views: 2633

Re: The Absinthe Drinker (1902)

I didn't know that picture, but I did know this one: http://www.wikipaintings.org/en/edgar-degas/the-absinthe-drinker-1876 Just in case that fact is vaguely interesting. I've been doing pretty clumsily but you've given me an idea of rewriting the poem in the voice of the woman after she's seen the p...
by David2
Sat Nov 02, 2013 11:13 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Green Bay
Replies: 12
Views: 1136

Re: Green Bay

cynwulf wrote:but I can see nothing wrong with rhyming. Yet I don't understand why you've stuck to one rhyme (rather monotonous after a while) through so many lines, only to change in the last couplet.
I'll go along with that, Joe.

Cheers

David
by David2
Sat Nov 02, 2013 10:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: And when we were sat in the Odeon -revised
Replies: 13
Views: 937

Re: And when we were sat in the Odeon

I must be a bit thick this morning. I can't see where the Odeon comes into it, and I don't know where Remember To Leave Reality At Home comes from, although it did remind me of the sign outside Springfield Castle Retirement Home: Thank you for not discussing the outside world. Is the voice coming fr...