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by David2
Mon Oct 21, 2013 4:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Absolution published in Halloween Anthology
Replies: 29
Views: 2051

Re: Absolution

Yes indeed. Well done, Jackie. Which version did they take?
by David2
Sun Oct 20, 2013 6:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Retitled: Caliban on Oxford Street
Replies: 29
Views: 1818

Re: A weekend in London, 1972

when somebody looked after the milking I guess you're looking for an authentic voice That's it, mac, but it is a bit of a mouthful, isn't it? It feels to me a little too laid-back though (heading for prostrate) I'm not taking that lying down. Actually, I'm not. I agree that "We had a nice time" is ...
by David2
Sun Oct 20, 2013 12:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Buriti
Replies: 11
Views: 849

Re: The Buriti

Do you really want to have "the rain" twice in S1? If you didn't, it could look like this: Rain fingers the awning. And now a fist flattens the flowers, sends inch-long ants to the dank roots of the buriti. spawn is borne on to birthing-grounds Not sure how I feel about the implied borne / born pun ...
by David2
Sun Oct 20, 2013 10:51 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Conquering America
Replies: 15
Views: 1101

Re: Conquering America

We know that! But that's brilliant, Ray. Well done.
by David2
Sat Oct 19, 2013 11:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Retitled: Caliban on Oxford Street
Replies: 29
Views: 1818

Retitled: Caliban on Oxford Street

AND AGAIN On one of our rare holidays, when somebody else took over the chores: the milking and all the half-understood jobs that made up our father's life out of doors, we went to London - where they'd been for their honeymoon, were pictured there in new hats and coats, posing shyly with pigeons in...
by David2
Sat Oct 19, 2013 10:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Winds of the Ross (v2)
Replies: 5
Views: 481

Re: Winds of the Ross

It isn't that the trees can only grow at unexpected angles, never fully flourishing or thriving only in some elongated way that suits the ghosts of gales. I know those trees, but I'm not going to get into an argument about relative wildness. I imagine it is wilder up there where you are. More north...
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 5:21 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: The English Chicago Review/Lancs Mag
Replies: 2
Views: 450

Re: The English Chicago Review/Lancs Mag

Very close to the Journal? That's Maryport, Cumbria, I think.
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 5:17 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Rialto1
Replies: 18
Views: 1407

Re: Rialto1

Wow! Les Murray? No way!
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 5:16 pm
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 492
Views: 184792

Re: Who's reading what?

I don't remember being disappointed by the ending of Embassytown . but I do remember being bowled over by the start. Is that in effect the same thing? I'm reading Railsea at the moment. Started it, and got a fair bit of the way through it, before realising it's actually supposed to be a "young adult...
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 3:53 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On the misprizing of sons
Replies: 8
Views: 664

Re: On the misprizing of sons

Thankee, Geoff. It's not so much a reply to a poem as to a glib remark about sons I made myself in response to k-j's lovely 8th poem. I thought about it and regretted it. This is my Self-Criticism. Thank you very much, Cliff. Very nice of you to say so. And I say cool a lot too, much to the despair ...
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 3:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: TBC (68/101*)
Replies: 3
Views: 477

Re: TBC (68/101*)

Can I just say what a great (new) adjective titchmarshish is?
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 3:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The 1697 Visit of Martin Martin to St Kilda
Replies: 6
Views: 479

Re: The 1679 Visit of Martin Martin to St Kilda

Màrtainn MacGilleMhàrtainn, eh? (Cut and paste job.) Wikipedia, however - I know, I know, but still - says it was 1697. Nice poem, I like how the rhymes come and go. So do I. It's rather like the sea slapping lazily against a rock. From the poem alone, however, I would have deduced that he was being...
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 2:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Spring
Replies: 19
Views: 1220

Re: Spring

Restricting myself just to David S's point about the dictionary (and I like riparian), I'm currently reading selected / collected poems by Louis MacNeice and Les Murray - two very different poets! - and I'm having regular recourse to a dictionary for both of them. Hard words not essential, but never...
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 2:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Parfitt
Replies: 15
Views: 979

Re: Parfitt

Very good. My only quibble is the same one that Geoff and Ros have. (I really don't like that "ate", but perhaps that's colloquial round your parts. Geographically speaking, I mean)

I might remark that puberty was, indeed, a bugger, but that could be misconstrued.

Cheers

David
by David2
Fri Oct 18, 2013 1:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sleeping between two women ought to be
Replies: 8
Views: 545

Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Antcliff wrote:There is a powerful argument for monogamy here.
I can see it on a T shirt.

Embrace monogamy ...

because it's less awkward.
by David2
Wed Oct 16, 2013 6:18 pm
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 492
Views: 184792

Re: Who's reading what?

Finished A Storm of Swords. It picked up. I tried the books but couldn't get into them. I am watching the TV version with the lad, though. A couple of hundred pages into A Fire Upon the Deep. It's quite the universe. Runs the gamut from medieval situations on a backwater planet to extragalactic, tr...
by David2
Mon Oct 14, 2013 6:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Record Ghosts (v4)
Replies: 10
Views: 833

Re: The Record Ghosts (v3)

Antcliff wrote:To be a Welsh puddler, you need big, hot balls.
OK. What else?
by David2
Sun Oct 13, 2013 3:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Record Ghosts (v4)
Replies: 10
Views: 833

Re: The Record Ghosts (v2)

Very good, very haunting subject matter. And you're right, there is always one, at least. I must admit, I didn't notice the (near-)rhyming. Just wondering whether it would be better to reorganise the last verse so as to finish on "the known Victorian dead", which is a lovely resonant phrase. What on...
by David2
Sun Oct 13, 2013 3:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: TBC (68/101*)
Replies: 3
Views: 477

Re: TBC (68/101*)

Going back to the source: I firmly belief that talent is entirely down to practice ... 2006. So did you actually predate Malcolm Gladwell and his 10,000 hours? Anyway, it's been a while, so I can't remember if there is a theme or a thread here, or just a series of unconnected poems. And I know nothi...
by David2
Wed Oct 09, 2013 6:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On the misprizing of sons
Replies: 8
Views: 664

Re: On the misprizing of sons

Antcliff wrote:..and his daughter runs at great speeds.
Ah! Completely overlooked that corollary!
by David2
Wed Oct 09, 2013 6:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I'd row to Skye (v2)
Replies: 6
Views: 454

Re: I'd row to Skye (v2)

I like it. I like it so much I find I don't like the brutal bathos of the ending (which Elph likes, which makes me think I'm being over-precious. I probably am.)

So the ending is certainly effective. I agree with Ray about the original last verse.

Cheers

David
by David2
Wed Oct 09, 2013 6:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On the misprizing of sons
Replies: 8
Views: 664

On the misprizing of sons

He told us, with a twinkle in his eye,
his rules of parenthood: raising a daughter's
like hand-rearing an overwrought gazelle;

a son, on the other hand, is like having a tortoise.
His son, they say, is rather shy,
and rarely comes out of his shell.
by David2
Sun Oct 06, 2013 7:46 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Southlight
Replies: 23
Views: 2200

Re: Southlight

Thanks, Ros, Seth and Mac. Very glad you enjoyed them. Hope you enjoy the mag, Seth. And they're open for submissions for the next issue! Very much enjoyed re-reading these. Your style has changed quite a lot since then? Thanks, Ros. That's an oddly worrying comment, though! (Has it?) Cheers all David
by David2
Sun Oct 06, 2013 7:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: 8th
Replies: 9
Views: 759

Re: 8th

Ah, a paean to fatherhood. More to the point, as this is a girl we're talking about, a paean to advanced fatherhood. (Girls and boys. It's like the difference between hand-rearing an overwrought gazelle and having a tortoise. Sorry Sam, slightly unfair, but ...) phasers set to stun? L4 in V2 seems a...
by David2
Sat Oct 05, 2013 2:52 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Southlight
Replies: 23
Views: 2200

Re: Southlight

This arrived, unexpectedly, in the post this morning, and it's quite a lovely thing. My poems nestle on a page opposite the end of an essay by James Kelman. Well I was impressed. They're from some of my back pages - http://www.poetsgraves.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?f=44&t=10461 http://www.poetsgraves...