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by Jackie
Wed Jul 03, 2013 9:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Photo
Replies: 8
Views: 667

The Photo

Caught here fresh from the upstairs glass with their youthful breaths drawn in excitement they freeze on the stair as if in headlights. Smile, we say, and they bare their teeth widely not to smear the gel. They drape for the second take on the banister like actors who've dramatically forgotten their...
by Jackie
Wed Jul 03, 2013 12:24 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Greetings!
Replies: 9
Views: 5766

Re: Greetings!

Thanks, Antcliff.
by Jackie
Tue Jul 02, 2013 11:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Christian
Replies: 9
Views: 704

Re: Christian

Your images are so sharp, in so few words! I like the connection between God is enough for me --what God provides for me is sufficient, and I covet nothing more--and the abundance you see in her--the whole of Africa shining through, and the wonder of her headtie. Comparing lips to what I presume is ...
by Jackie
Tue Jul 02, 2013 10:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Half Cellar
Replies: 3
Views: 429

Re: The Half Cellar

Thank you, Ray and David--I appreciate your feedback. My childhood visits to our grandparents' house, but especially to explore all the wonders in his half cellar, were a treat for me. Once he gave me an old dark brown clay jug with a wide cork stopper that I found there. All through school and coll...
by Jackie
Tue Jul 02, 2013 12:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Half Cellar
Replies: 3
Views: 429

The Half Cellar

Regretfully not shut out a city wind blows in and shatters Grandpa's jug, the one that thirty years of cork had kept his fusty cellar in. In a funk I've raised one cork edge like an inclined door and creaked down three steps into Wisconsin, past the snow for a moment into the dank, into his store ro...
by Jackie
Mon Jul 01, 2013 10:06 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Greetings!
Replies: 9
Views: 5766

Re: Greetings!

Thanks, Ros. There was one called Alienflower, and Poets Workshop at iVillage. As for cultures, I guess the usual problem for me is that I'm trying to express something that sprouted from Africa to readers from the West.

Jackie
by Jackie
Mon Jul 01, 2013 8:22 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Greetings!
Replies: 9
Views: 5766

Greetings!

Greetings! I was stuck when the PG registration form asked me what time zone I live in. Right now, and part of each year, I am in GMT -4/5. But most of the year I am in GMT, because I live in West Africa. I've had trouble on other poetry sites making myself understood; when I feel like I'm explainin...
by Jackie
Mon Jul 01, 2013 7:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: You, me and everybody.
Replies: 7
Views: 779

Re: You, me and everybody.

Kevj, you show good presentation skills here—I can see this coming from a pulpit, or some other stage. Putting it into stanzas and poetic lines probably organized it and made it more concise. It's a very clear persuasive argument. However, I don't find it poetic. It doesn't touch my senses, or stun ...
by Jackie
Mon Jul 01, 2013 5:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Teacher
Replies: 4
Views: 629

Re: Teacher

I think we've all been there in that last stanza, so it really hooks the reader. I've been there as a teacher, whose students didn't understand a word I'd said but fell for how I said it; and as a student, who'd do anything to please this charmer of a teacher! Would you consider removing the strong ...