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by JJWilliamson
Mon Feb 24, 2020 6:03 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Bosley Cloud, Cheshire (revised)
Replies: 7
Views: 1566

Re: The Bosley Cloud, Cheshire

Thank you very much, mac and Not, for dropping in to comment. I know I keep saying it but it IS much appreciated. Lovely yellows JJ. Sorry, I've got to ask the palette question :D ...No prob's. Titanium white, cad yellow, primary yellow, home mixed greens using Paynes grey and yellow with a touch of...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Feb 21, 2020 6:09 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Bosley Cloud, Cheshire (revised)
Replies: 7
Views: 1566

The Bosley Cloud, Cheshire (revised)

Oil on canvas 50 x 40 cms. The Cloud is a hill and rock formation that overlooks the Cheshire Plain, NW England. Many walkers ascend to this modest summit simply to enjoy the views. I wonder about the aerial perspective. The linear perspective is working well enough but the atmospheric perspective i...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Feb 21, 2020 6:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7539
Views: 935073

Re: Haiku Train

Eyes arrived, not love,
I thought, as she
caught me looking.
by JJWilliamson
Fri Feb 21, 2020 5:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Psychodrama
Replies: 7
Views: 658

Re: Psychodrama

This is surely about Caroline Flack. Sad, desperate, confused and in the end lost. S2 L1 ...excellent. Spot on imho, because of the strain of pretending. Enjoyed the R & R. Thought it was all very well done, actually, with a succinct and poignant delivery. The brevity added to the drama as it herald...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Feb 21, 2020 5:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Liberty Taking (revised ... again ... and again)
Replies: 20
Views: 1140

Re: Liberty Taking (revised)

Enjoyed this a lot, Not, especially your deft use of meter. Bravo. Lear's meter was/is a bit wonky in places but it works. I've considered that aspect and still feel your flow is great. Super rhythms. A few minor thoughts for your deliberation: . Fair Exchange* Like a tree in a wood the Piggy-Wig st...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Feb 21, 2020 5:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Play-Worker
Replies: 7
Views: 798

Re: Play-Worker

Yes, the rhythms work well, Jules, as do the rhymes and playfulness of the lines. It also reflects how the other half thinks, how their impressions seem to typecast the worker. However, part of me wondered who was speaking. The close suggests a shift/turn. "Are you a pop star" is a great hook. That ...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Feb 14, 2020 7:19 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Emergence (Sunrise)
Replies: 4
Views: 629

Re: Emergence (Sunrise)

Thanks, Not. I appreciate the reply AND agree about the title. Titles are such a pain, especially
when you change your mind every five minutes, as is my wont. :)

I have it hanging in my living room.

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Tue Feb 11, 2020 6:21 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Emergence (Sunrise)
Replies: 4
Views: 629

Re: Emergence (Sunrise)

Thanks, mac I always enjoy your feedback and analysis. Impressive as always JJ. Interesting juxtaposition of dynamic sky and quiet sea. ...The sky was the inspiration for this piece, especially when set against that tranquil sea. I nearly called this one "Primordial", because it felt like a beginnin...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Feb 09, 2020 7:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Not to a Mouse [revision 3]
Replies: 12
Views: 757

Re: Not to a Mouse (Written for Burns Night) [revised]

Thanks, Ray and Not, for the comments and suggestions. (again) Enjoyed a lot. Love bijou/shrew and nature/ chamber is my kind of rhyme. Is there a difference between frae and fae? ...Nope, it's a typo. Good catch. Maybe "but mair like a mole...."? ...I'll have another look. Thanks for that. . Hi JJ,...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Feb 09, 2020 9:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Not to a Mouse [revision 3]
Replies: 12
Views: 757

Re: Not to a Mouse (Written for Burns Night)

Thank you very much, Not, Tristan and mac, for the great comments and nudges. Appreciated, as always. . Hi JJ. :) Couple or four v.minor nits. L4. You've the Lynn Truss problem with 'shoots under glass' Made me smile, but for the wrong reason. ...Ha! A smile is a smile, is it not, Not? L7, 'mite' re...
by JJWilliamson
Sat Feb 08, 2020 4:26 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Emergence (Sunrise)
Replies: 4
Views: 629

Emergence (Sunrise)

This is a greyscale oil on canvas, 50 x 40 cms. The horizon is actually straight but the painting is a bit to one side, hence the distortion. I used an "Artist's Grey" for the entire painting, with hints of Paynes Grey and titanium white. This is basically the final version, one that was also comple...
by JJWilliamson
Sat Feb 08, 2020 3:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Not to a Mouse [revision 3]
Replies: 12
Views: 757

Not to a Mouse [revision 3]

Ah see a wee beastie emerge frae a hole, a shadow in shadows, a form wi' a goal. She brattles thro' runnels, a' matted wi' grass, tae snaffle some seedlings 'n' shoots under gless. She follows th' hedges ‘en bolts tae her hoose, is aften mistaken fur auld Rabbie’s moose, but mair like a mole, nae a ...
by JJWilliamson
Sat Feb 08, 2020 3:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Found Him Again on Facebook(version 3)
Replies: 7
Views: 540

Re: Found Him Again on Facebook

Yes, keep that last strophe, Eira. I've hummed and harred but have finally come round to keeping it. Found Him Again on Facebook A feather-touch on her shoulder and husky whisper - like to dance? They twisted, jived, eyes writing love-notes. He fed her Black Magic, hungry lips mouthing frisky finger...
by JJWilliamson
Sat Feb 08, 2020 3:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Genetics
Replies: 8
Views: 580

Re: Genetics

I also see a genetic legacy, Ray, and one that points to the title. I read concern and an internal dilemma from the speaker, where he thinks twice before saying nothing. However, there exists an awareness that lurks beneath the surface, quietly waiting. There lies the tension. The reader is left won...
by JJWilliamson
Wed Jan 29, 2020 8:04 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Anthropomorphic
Replies: 11
Views: 679

Re: Anthropomorphic

Enjoyed it, Ray. The title is fair enough as we DO attribute human characteristics to penguins. (well, I do) The 'dignity' is a cool way to contrast awkwardness with style. Put a smile on my face. Best JJ it’s hard to single heroes out they all look much the same to us black and white formal dress M...
by JJWilliamson
Wed Jan 29, 2020 7:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Curiosity (v3b)
Replies: 30
Views: 1925

Re: Curiosity (v3)

Excellent, Not, and a bit macabre. The close had me squirming, rightly or wrongly, as the 'research' could represent a "what if" situation, where the girl was curious to see what would happen to the cat if she killed it. I liked 'hidden' as it supports the notion that death was inflicted by the girl...
by JJWilliamson
Wed Jan 29, 2020 7:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Anglesey birds in mystery mass death (revision4)
Replies: 19
Views: 1725

Re: Anglesey birds in mystery mass death (revision3)

Perfectly clear now, mac. The close explains a lot in its present form AND helps the mind to conjure the image.
I looked this up, via Google, and was amazed to see the scene. Glare from the road indeed. (perhaps :) )

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Tue Jan 28, 2020 6:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Anglesey birds in mystery mass death (revision4)
Replies: 19
Views: 1725

Re: Anglesey birds in mystery mass death (revision2)

Hi, mac A very interesting news snippet and one that I enjoyed reading, especially as it is so believable. I've seen this sort of thing before, where birds are fooled by optical illusions. S1 was easy to follow with its delightful insights but S2 saw me struggling. The title helped me out, as did L'...
by JJWilliamson
Mon Jan 27, 2020 3:31 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Nestling (rev2)
Replies: 12
Views: 930

Re: The Nestling (rev2)

Powerful and sad write, Eira. I like rev 2 and have but a couple of suggestions, and they're minor. The Nestling (rev2) Hunched over the body tumbled from its sycamore cradle, her mind takes flight. He arrived quietly, entwined, ...Would a full stop work here? If so a cap would follow, of course. vo...
by JJWilliamson
Mon Jan 27, 2020 3:20 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: All the Little Coasts of America (Revision)
Replies: 16
Views: 1315

Re: All the Little Coasts of America

Great fun, Jules.

Like Jackie I'll need more time with the text but I did enjoy this quirky poem, smiling from the first line to the last.

It's the kind of poem I'd like to find accidently when reading this and that on a plane. It would make my day.

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Mon Jan 27, 2020 3:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Grandpa
Replies: 10
Views: 1349

Re: Grandpa

A very warm and enjoyable poem, Jackie He was trim, a tall man who wore spats, a fact hidden now. ...I'm assuming nobody wants to admit to having once worn spats. Snaps always caught him on the fly laughing. ...Would "laughing on the fly" be more consistent with the voice? Boys then longed to be tra...
by JJWilliamson
Tue Jan 14, 2020 7:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Smoke
Replies: 7
Views: 940

Re: Smoke

I also like it, Tony, and wondered if the final version might lie between Not's version and your own.

Enjoyed, especially second time round.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Fri Dec 20, 2019 7:34 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Day's End (revision 2 on top of revision 1)
Replies: 6
Views: 751

Re: Day's End (revision 2 on top of revision 1)

Thanks again, mac, for coming back to this thorny effort. Believe it or not I'm still working on this. I've decided to darken the edges of the sky and snow considerably to intensify the central glow. The palette for the shadows was titanium white, phthalo blue, cadmium red and a touch of Paynes grey...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Dec 20, 2019 7:28 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Nermin Kura --Galerie Nev-Ankara Turkey
Replies: 3
Views: 1058

Re: Nermin Kura --Galerie Nev-Ankara Turkey

Absolutely beautiful, Lotus. They are tremendously eye-catching and spiritual.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Wed Dec 18, 2019 7:38 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Mac's Watercolour Attempts December
Replies: 10
Views: 1072

Re: Mac's Watercolour Attempts December

Nice ekphrastic poem for a very interesting painting, mac.

The semi-abstract nature of the painting adds to the mystery, and the colours are very eye-catching. I like it!

JJ