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by RCJames
Thu May 05, 2016 2:08 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Self-portrait
Replies: 3
Views: 1171

Re: Self-portrait

Good moody shot, I think you could have lightened it up just a hair, but nice.RC
by RCJames
Thu May 05, 2016 2:06 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: A heron in the tree
Replies: 8
Views: 3173

Re: A heron in the tree

Outstanding shot. I assume you used telephoto, great angle. Looks like you added some contrast, but that could be the original shot. Well done, RC
by RCJames
Wed May 04, 2016 3:47 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Variations of the Moon and Flora
Replies: 1
Views: 885

Variations of the Moon and Flora

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computer manipulation of moon photo and macro photo of flower in Santa Elena, Colombia
by RCJames
Tue May 03, 2016 9:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tabi-tabi Apo [Hmong Song (revision4)]
Replies: 16
Views: 1956

Re: Hmong Song (revision3)

I took the couple out of it, as it was complicating things. The real deal here is the sound (s) and how close-knit the community is . RC
by RCJames
Tue May 03, 2016 7:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Danger of Talkative Strangers
Replies: 8
Views: 1046

Re: The Danger of Talkative Strangers

Thank you Peter, that is reassuring. RC
by RCJames
Tue May 03, 2016 5:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tabi-tabi Apo [Hmong Song (revision4)]
Replies: 16
Views: 1956

Re: Hmong Song (revision2)

JJ - That was all helpful, I put most of it into play. Thanks mucho, RC
by RCJames
Tue May 03, 2016 4:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Danger of Talkative Strangers
Replies: 8
Views: 1046

Re: The Danger of Talkative Strangers

Not to say they're accurate imitations, but I tried to approach what I imagined E.D.'s normal conversation and vocabulary might be: I have seen the asphodel bloom in sequence, my mind gauging the splendor about to appear, my own words, endlessly spinning, as the Indian soul within distorted visions;...
by RCJames
Mon May 02, 2016 10:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tabi-tabi Apo [Hmong Song (revision4)]
Replies: 16
Views: 1956

Re: Hmong Song (revision)

Bodkin - I din't intend it to be the story of two individuals, the couple, at all, it's more about the sounds , the music as language. The personification of the land is another matter, it reads "blends" with the laughter and sounds, and it may be a sgtretch but, I see the land as exulting. There is...
by RCJames
Mon May 02, 2016 7:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Danger of Talkative Strangers
Replies: 8
Views: 1046

Re: The Danger of Talkative Strangers

David - I think part of the propblem may be that she is talking about modern mechanisms, not isolated talk about her times. Possibly. Also, and this is my own assumptioon, that her language may be slightly different in the poems as compared to her conversation, which this piece mostly contains. Anyw...
by RCJames
Mon May 02, 2016 4:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Danger of Talkative Strangers
Replies: 8
Views: 1046

The Danger of Talkative Strangers

(In a time warp, Emily Dickinson confronts the Internet) As mother would have said, 'goodness gracious me, the things you see in broad daylight these days, and things in the dark do have an irritating glow.' I have seen the asphodel bloom in sequence, my mind gauging the splendor about to appear, bu...
by RCJames
Mon May 02, 2016 4:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: But mine own
Replies: 19
Views: 1701

Re: But mine own

This is clever, and has the sort of light-hearted humor you find in Dorothy Parker. Thank you, Lord, for making me a dilettante, an occasional poet, a Sunday rhymer, I agree you could steer away from writing with another category here cultivating quietly my own small garden whose meagre produce I am...
by RCJames
Mon May 02, 2016 4:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Remind me
Replies: 13
Views: 1357

Re: Remind me

Ros - I am not familiar with some of these British terms - tannoy - never heard that one. There's a sense of mean-spiritedness, teasing, taunting in this. Loiter in the market square until the locals comment that the statue looks a bit like you. I do like this especially. The feeling, for me, is tha...
by RCJames
Mon May 02, 2016 1:20 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tabi-tabi Apo [Hmong Song (revision4)]
Replies: 16
Views: 1956

Re: Hmong Song

Luce - I wondered where you got to after MM, didn't take long to find out. Glad you're here, seems a little livelier than most. I like your suggestions, just have to sort them out and apply. I like especially your idea of dropping the 3 lines from the ending and moving the end up to the previous sta...
by RCJames
Sun May 01, 2016 8:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tabi-tabi Apo [Hmong Song (revision4)]
Replies: 16
Views: 1956

Re: Hmong Song

I guess I'm just too easy, change a line at the drop of a nit, looking at it again, I think you're probably right, the origina did work and the break does destroy that initial feel. Thanks. Yah, "grace-gliding" trying to say something is moving in a very harmonious, graceful way.
by RCJames
Sun May 01, 2016 7:20 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Leaving Town on a Circus Train
Replies: 0
Views: 3312

Leaving Town on a Circus Train

I left on a circus train, straightaway out of town. Lorenzo, the leader of the chimpanzees, in the seat right next to me, was clapping to his overly expressive grunts and screeches. He beat on a prop box in our opening conversation when I showed up on the scene. I thought I got his meaning and nodde...
by RCJames
Sun May 01, 2016 7:14 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Taking the Biscuit
Replies: 4
Views: 5454

Re: Taking the Biscuit

I enjoyed, had me all the way through. The priest's fumbling loss of composure was resolved through his resorting to the scriptures. I dunno, don't have much more to say, the narrative was smooth and rhythmic. Good work, RC
by RCJames
Sun May 01, 2016 5:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tabi-tabi Apo [Hmong Song (revision4)]
Replies: 16
Views: 1956

Re: Hmong Song

Yah, that break is rough, I think I broke it to keep the line lengths similar. Thanks, RC
by RCJames
Sun May 01, 2016 3:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tabi-tabi Apo [Hmong Song (revision4)]
Replies: 16
Views: 1956

Tabi-tabi Apo [Hmong Song (revision4)]

Tabi-Tabi Apo (Vietnamese Hmong Speak a tonal language Their music imitates speech. Reed notes represent words.) In these mountains, age-old harmonies abide. The bright lilting trill of a flute, gives us the name of the owner. The song glances over terrain in thought grace-gliding. The shrill whistl...
by RCJames
Sun May 01, 2016 3:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Progress
Replies: 13
Views: 1307

Re: Progress

Ray - I like the rhythms here and some interesting and credible rhymes. I wrote a poem about Emily Dickinson in a time warp confronting the gift of a computer, perhaps will post it later. The internet tide caught me as an oldster to the methods, my son's a whiz, but I'm still trying to catch up. The...
by RCJames
Sun May 01, 2016 2:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Doon the Pit (Was Nightshift)
Replies: 20
Views: 2024

Re: Night Shift (revision 3)

JJ - The atmosphere, mood, and methods ring true in this, from what I've seen in movies and read in books, can't speak from real experience. Seams of coal and collier boys moulded my apprenticeship with handheld picks and taught me how to mine (1st stanza seems slightly awkward, maybe it's "apprenti...