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by Poet
Sun Dec 22, 2019 12:25 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Solace
Replies: 7
Views: 643

Re: Solace

I though the poem was beautiful and had a cadence that I have seen before, not bad for your first post Bihikku, two thumbs up!
by Poet
Sun Dec 22, 2019 12:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Cat Long (revision)
Replies: 13
Views: 1433

Re: Cat Long (revision)

There's more than one way to skin a cat to swing a cat, to scam a cat to dress a cat, to break a cat down to bring a cat to book, to make a bad cat come good, to turn a cat to get inside a cat's flaps, to become the top cat in the cattiest of all towns (Reminds me of a children's poem, green eggs w...
by Poet
Thu Sep 26, 2019 9:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: An Invitation to Wolves
Replies: 7
Views: 620

Re: An Invitation to Wolves

Nice poem, love the imagery and the story, is this a fantasy poem? Because it reads like one.
by Poet
Thu Sep 26, 2019 8:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Blues & Pinks (V2 formerly Let Yourself Go)
Replies: 14
Views: 1222

Re: The Blues & Pinks (V2 formerly Let Yourself Go)

Can I ask a question? What is jowls?
by Poet
Fri Sep 20, 2019 8:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Theseus in Old Age
Replies: 11
Views: 1214

Re: Theseus in Old Age

Interesting poem, it does feel like a monologue and the way it is written is interesting. I have to say that it is really dense too because of the way it is written. Nothing to really add from there.
by Poet
Thu Sep 19, 2019 9:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Ticking Hands
Replies: 3
Views: 716

Re: Ticking Hands

So much condensed imagery and they way it is written is quite intense so that is a plus.
by Poet
Thu Sep 19, 2019 9:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: That Night The Key Outgrew The Door
Replies: 9
Views: 1138

Re: That Night The Key Outgrew The Door

Interesting, I love the strength of the piece and where you took it towards.
by Poet
Thu Sep 19, 2019 9:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In The Dead of Night
Replies: 1
Views: 677

In The Dead of Night

I left you all alone in the night by yourself, poor me I thought of you once I was in my lake house in Ethiopia. There is something about you, those qualities that I liked about you, you were a shining star dancing in the sky There was something about your style and grace and charm. But I left you a...
by Poet
Thu Sep 19, 2019 9:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Adelphophagy (v6)
Replies: 17
Views: 1620

Re: Adelphophagy (v4)

Wow! Now that is some nice imagery! There is a lot to say about this piece! I liked the imagery!
by Poet
Thu Sep 19, 2019 9:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Art Lover (revision3)
Replies: 21
Views: 1753

Re: Art Lover

Wow! Nice poem! I liked the message of the piece and that is it. Nothing much to say about it. Good job!
by Poet
Tue Sep 03, 2019 2:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: How the Oyster Got His Pearl v2
Replies: 14
Views: 1039

Re: How the Oyster Got His Pearl

Is this a story or a poem? Also It's interesting for sure.
by Poet
Fri Aug 30, 2019 2:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: What took you so long?
Replies: 4
Views: 819

Re: What took you so long?

What's flitted? What does that mean?
by Poet
Sun Aug 25, 2019 1:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Dear White Girl
Replies: 10
Views: 1102

Re: Dear White Girl

Namyh wrote:
Sat Aug 24, 2019 12:43 am
Poet - I liked this but....what happens if she does come back?? Namyh
Then all would be dandy. Why?
by Poet
Wed Aug 21, 2019 12:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Dear White Girl
Replies: 10
Views: 1102

Re: Dear White Girl

I desire more than just the colour of your skin White girl, The use of white in your poem is a real hook. There is an implication that colour difference is/was an attraction, despite the assertion otherwise, but then any skin colour referencing is evocative (eg using Black rather than White in the ...
by Poet
Wed Aug 21, 2019 12:44 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Dear White Girl
Replies: 10
Views: 1102

Re: Dear White Girl

Hi Poet, "White girl" seems to be a category in the poem, rather than a single person. Is that what you intended? When you say "I’ve met you before" I take it that this rejection has happened with other white girls, and the narrator is asking this one to explain why. Perhaps "White girl" symbolizes...
by Poet
Wed Aug 21, 2019 12:41 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Dear White Girl
Replies: 10
Views: 1102

Re: Dear White Girl

"I’ve met you before I will say it again. I’ve met you before And I want it to last forever...." These were the lines that intrigued me the most in the poem. Did the narrator meet the girl before, in another place, in another lifetime? Is that why the hurt is so deep? I'm wondering how the poem wou...
by Poet
Mon Aug 19, 2019 11:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Robert Dudley - The Knot Garden (revision4)
Replies: 31
Views: 2521

Re: The Knot Garden (revised)

Impressive! I like where you took this poem, was a bumpy ride for sure. I don't have any nits on it but I thought it was beautiful.
by Poet
Mon Aug 19, 2019 10:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Dear White Girl
Replies: 10
Views: 1102

Re: Dear White Girl

I desire more than just the colour of your skin White girl, I need to know whether you will come back to me. I like that stanza poet. It says a lot. We all need to know people will come back to us whether it be a seconds lates, a day later, a week later or even years later. It’s the returning that ...
by Poet
Mon Aug 19, 2019 9:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Dear White Girl
Replies: 10
Views: 1102

Dear White Girl

White girl I’ve been at cross-roads during this time. I tried to kiss you and you rejected me back saying that it was too late I told myself that I would never mingle with a girl again. Especially not from a country of only white people Sorry but my regards to the need to tell you that I am sorry th...
by Poet
Mon Aug 19, 2019 9:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In The December Sky, We Cast a Spell
Replies: 6
Views: 820

Re: In The December Sky, We Cast a Spell

Poet, Very intriguing. Is there a reason you've written this in couplets? I'm having trouble following the logic. For example, you say "we dare not remember their names" but soon after say "their names are etched in stone"—so why worry about remembering them? You might want to try consolidating it ...
by Poet
Mon Aug 19, 2019 9:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In The December Sky, We Cast a Spell
Replies: 6
Views: 820

Re: In The December Sky, We Cast a Spell

Personally I like those signature 'theres'. If you changed them the poem would lose some of its distinctive character, though it would still be good. I think it was one of the James who cited Billy English in defence of one of your other poems, who also uses a lot of intentional misspellings and od...
by Poet
Mon Aug 05, 2019 2:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In The December Sky, We Cast a Spell
Replies: 6
Views: 820

Re: In The December Sky, We Cast a Spell

Hi Poet, lots to like in this far-ranging piece. Who exactly'we' or 'the others' are is quite mysterious. You consistently spell 'their' as 'there' in the numerous contexts where we would expect the conventional version. I assume that is intentional - a sort of dissident, distancing device that rei...
by Poet
Sun Aug 04, 2019 6:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Carbuncles in Sheffield (Was: Time Bombs in Sheffield)
Replies: 17
Views: 1321

Re: Carbuncles in Sheffield (Was: Time Bombs in Sheffield)

Beautiful writing, I love this piece. There was something special about it I just can't put a finger on it.
by Poet
Fri Aug 02, 2019 4:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Blue
Replies: 26
Views: 1739

Re: Blue

Interesting Perry great imagery, off topic I know but are you American? I don't like Americans very much (no offense)
by Poet
Fri Aug 02, 2019 3:53 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: [No Title Yet]
Replies: 15
Views: 1064

Re: [No Title Yet]

Perry wrote:
Fri Aug 02, 2019 3:41 pm
Thank you, Poet.

Yes, I'm gay, and this was about a male encounter. I suspect I'm the only gay person who is active on the forum now.
Oh so I was right, nice! I was just curious that's all.