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by Poet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 6:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Struggling with Conversion
Replies: 9
Views: 827

Re: Struggling with Conversion

Great poem, the message was clear, and there is some imagery as well. Nice poem, also I am not good at critiquing poems (I am a beginner) but I am slowly getting there.
by Poet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 5:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?
Replies: 17
Views: 992

Re: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?

Hi Poet, some interesting use of language here. I like the phrase 'the smallest pockets of sky' With nothing being quite where or what we expect here I find myself wondering what this 'I' of the narrator is . . . perhaps an animal or plant or even extra-terrestrial. It addresses us as 'my lovers' y...
by Poet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 5:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?
Replies: 17
Views: 992

Re: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?

Perry wrote:
Mon Jun 10, 2019 5:42 am
People who write poetry have a love of the sound of language written or spoken beautifully.

Is English your first language?
Yeah english is my first language, I am from Canada after all, Ontario.
by Poet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 4:17 am
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: The Person You Are
Replies: 1
Views: 2676

Re: The Person You Are

Just one question, is this a story or a poem?
by Poet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 4:15 am
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Death Before Dishonour
Replies: 6
Views: 4019

Re: Death Before Dishonour

So is this a prose poem? It definitely reads as one.
by Poet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 4:12 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?
Replies: 17
Views: 992

Re: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?

Ok I see what you mean, makes sense, I understand poetry a lot better than i have been before, I always thought poetry as means to express your emotions on there.
by Poet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 2:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?
Replies: 17
Views: 992

Re: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?

Is my poetry bad to you? I still need work and also need advice on how to make it stronger.
by Poet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 1:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)
Replies: 24
Views: 2582

Re: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey

Interesting poem, lots of colour in this piece, brightly expressed.
by Poet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 11:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Good Old Fashioned Courage v4.
Replies: 23
Views: 2702

Re: Good Old Fashioned Courage v4.

Great poem, nothing more to say here.
by Poet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 9:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Old Hippy V7
Replies: 24
Views: 1928

Re: Portobello Road V3 (was The Market)

I liked the poem, interesting lines, you took me back to the 70s for sure. Good poem.
by Poet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 9:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?
Replies: 17
Views: 992

Re: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?

Yeah and thanks I've not new to poetry at all, I've been writing professionally (or at least trying to) for four years now. So yeah my poetry needs work though.
by Poet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 7:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Usurped Excerpts
Replies: 3
Views: 916

Re: Usurped Excerpts

I like this poem, also I can't critique much here but I liked the imagery and the writing was superb because of the language you tired to express here. Really good writing.
by Poet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 7:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Walking Football 2nd version
Replies: 10
Views: 1077

Re: Walking Football

It's a bit complex for me but I liked it all the same though, good stuff.
by Poet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 1:51 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Where Are You? Are You There For Me?
Replies: 17
Views: 992

Where Are You? Are You There For Me?

I am alone and need friends Someone please help me. I am alone in this world and without you my lovers where would i be in the smallest pockets of sky, white clouds race past me. I am alone and need companionship And where there’s feelings attached to you my lovers. I am alone and need friends Where...
by Poet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 1:12 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 2909

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3

Interesting poem, i find the cadence and the repetition to be refreshing, good poem.
by Poet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 1:00 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: New Here
Replies: 1
Views: 854

New Here

Hey I am new here to poetry graves I've been writing poetry for about 3 years professionally and I am here for some critiques here and there. Also I write novels too but I am starting to get my bearings lately with poetry. As I prefer to write poetry than novels, anyway is there anyone else that is ...
by Poet
Sat Jun 08, 2019 10:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Jolly Blue Dragon
Replies: 4
Views: 1128

Re: The Jolly Blue Dragon

I liked the last two lines, it had this cadence that sounded serene.
by Poet
Sat Jun 08, 2019 10:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Old Hippy V7
Replies: 24
Views: 1928

Re: The Market V2 (was Portobello Road)

I liked the poem, the imagery was on point.
by Poet
Sat Jun 08, 2019 9:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Swan & The Hawk
Replies: 7
Views: 700

Re: The Swan & The Hawk

Oh ok thanks for your critique my friend.
by Poet
Sat Jun 08, 2019 5:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Swan & The Hawk
Replies: 7
Views: 700

The Swan & The Hawk

There was a swan in the water And it was beautifully dressed. And there was a brilliant China white wing fluttering to the foaming blue lake And there from the shadows was a little hawk descending down below. And I see the bird flying and dancing with the swan I see the earth and the bird but this b...
by Poet
Sat Jun 08, 2019 4:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Brent Aubade
Replies: 19
Views: 1869

Re: Aubade (was The First Day / Broken)

His extraordinary what? What about it? I wish there was more you added here. Anyway I liked the poem, it was interesting.