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by Poet
Fri Feb 21, 2020 5:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Psychodrama
Replies: 7
Views: 661

Re: Psychodrama

Her last performance was Greta Garbo: off camera, incommunicado; acting with cowardice or bravado to silence the hiss of the Thought Gestapo. Exhausted by the demand to pretend and cover the cuts that make-up won’t mend. How like her to buck an established trend and exit the stage on a masculine en...
by Poet
Thu Feb 20, 2020 7:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: At The Thunder House
Replies: 3
Views: 329

At The Thunder House

There was sound being played at the Thunder House Guitars guitar, drums drumming, singers singing, the bass bass! There was sound being played at the Thunder house It never seemed to end The playing continued on in the house, the smell of burning rubber filled their noses, the house was struck with ...
by Poet
Thu Feb 20, 2020 3:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Play-Worker
Replies: 7
Views: 800

Re: Play-Worker

Ok I am starting to get what this poem is about, cool and clever dude.
by Poet
Wed Feb 12, 2020 4:35 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: All the Little Coasts of America (Revision)
Replies: 16
Views: 1317

Re: All the Little Coasts of America (Revision)

- did everyone realise the inkblot image is the Americas mirrored horizontally and vertically?
I just realized that aswell.
by Poet
Wed Feb 12, 2020 2:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I grew up on this little island (revised)
Replies: 6
Views: 721

Re: I grew up on this little island (revised)

Revised version It rains almost every day— umbrellas unfurl like mushrooms dancing around puddles on human legs; ravens wear raindrops like pearl buttons stitched to feather overcoats. No one complains about the weather, but a rise in the price of postage stamps will start a riot. Newcomers are war...
by Poet
Tue Feb 11, 2020 9:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Crane Dancing
Replies: 9
Views: 643

Re: Crane Dancing

I find this poem to be exquisite because it had the qualities of a great poem, I'm being biased but I thought the poem itself was amazing and had a lot of depth to it (well maybe a little) but I thought it was beautiful cause of the imagery you used to create a dance of itself. Anyway thanks for sha...
by Poet
Tue Feb 11, 2020 4:27 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Waiting for Time (new version)
Replies: 7
Views: 582

Re: Waiting for Time (new version)

Perry wrote:
Tue Feb 11, 2020 12:22 am
Thank you, Poet.

It turns out my final line had a typo in it, which I have fixed. However, you seem to be saying that you'd like the final line dropped altogether.

Thanks for having a look.
Oh well ignore that post, I just wanted you to get rid of that typo that's all.
by Poet
Mon Feb 10, 2020 10:53 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Waiting for Time (new version)
Replies: 7
Views: 582

Re: Waiting for Time (new version)

There they are, still young, the entertainers who defined my age, who kindly shared their lives with me, still acting happy in re-runs on my old TV. I see their faces, hear their witty repartee, hear their plaintive songs that spoke of love or love escaping. Some of them are gone, others hidden in ...
by Poet
Thu Feb 06, 2020 9:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Tomorrow
Replies: 8
Views: 700

Re: Tomorrow

oggiesnr wrote:
Mon Feb 03, 2020 10:06 pm
Poet wrote:
Sun Feb 02, 2020 11:19 pm
DPC?
Should be DHL but it was a flash poem and I had a "senior" moment. Will amend in the rewrite,

Many thanks

Steve
What's DHL? Does it stand for something?
by Poet
Thu Feb 06, 2020 8:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Play-Worker
Replies: 7
Views: 800

Re: Play Worker

What is this poem about?
by Poet
Mon Feb 03, 2020 6:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Gather Around Writers & Novelists
Replies: 8
Views: 823

Re: Gather Around Writers & Novelists

Any thoughts?
by Poet
Mon Feb 03, 2020 6:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Out Of My League - revision
Replies: 11
Views: 973

Re: Out Of My League - revision

I don't get "into the drop of conferences", what does that mean?
by Poet
Sun Feb 02, 2020 11:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Tomorrow
Replies: 8
Views: 700

Re: Tomorrow

DPC?
by Poet
Sun Feb 02, 2020 8:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Last Conversation I Recall
Replies: 3
Views: 266

Re: The Last Conversation I Recall

What do you think about this revision? I feel it is good. (This will be a 1st revision) We shared a conversation at the cosmetic shop about the feelings I held concerning Russia and St. Petersburg. We talked for hours and hours about the rain and the countries we hailed from, not to mention about th...
by Poet
Sun Feb 02, 2020 8:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Last Conversation I Recall
Replies: 3
Views: 266

Re: The Last Conversation I Recall

It needs lots of trimming and I couldn't help myself, this is what I'd do with it - We shared a conversation at the cosmetic shop about the feelings I held concerning Russia and St. Petersburg. We talked for hours and hours about the rain and the countries we hailed from, not to mention the foreign...
by Poet
Sun Feb 02, 2020 7:30 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Last Conversation I Recall
Replies: 3
Views: 266

The Last Conversation I Recall

We shared a conversation earlier at the cosmetic shop about the feelings I shared about Russia and St. Petersburg. We talked for hours and hours about the rain and the countries we hailed from, not to mention about the foreign perfume I was smelling. (which smelled good by the way) There was a girl ...
by Poet
Sun Feb 02, 2020 7:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Found Him Again on Facebook(version 3)
Replies: 7
Views: 540

Re: Found Him Again on Facebook

Punch is spelt wrong, was that your intention Capricorn? Anyway great poem. My critique is that the five senses were not present and you should repair this poem with some smell, and you know what I mean next.
by Poet
Sun Feb 02, 2020 7:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: All the Little Coasts of America (Revision)
Replies: 16
Views: 1317

Re: All the Little Coasts of America (Revision)

Delightful poem! I like the humor in it too, you should publish this!
by Poet
Thu Jan 30, 2020 11:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Anthropomorphic
Replies: 11
Views: 679

Re: Anthropomorphic

it’s hard to single heroes out they all look much the same to us black and white formal dress Marxist maybe Chaplinesque they tramp the end of the world or cock their heads as if they heard something muffled on the wind punters chuckle (What is a punter?) when they flip or take their turn while mot...
by Poet
Thu Jan 23, 2020 6:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pilot-Light
Replies: 7
Views: 814

Re: Pilot-Light

Its blue bud of flame seemed as lonely and distant as Pluto as I peered through the window of the boiler-housing; when it went out as it frequently did, I marveled at the aplomb with which he re-lit it; rehearsed, a kind of dance that belied emergency; nothing ever goes out entirely. Interesting, t...
by Poet
Thu Jan 23, 2020 2:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I found myself there
Replies: 7
Views: 869

Re: I found myself there

In a half-made-bed of a house most hair was shocked. There was a potty full of piss in the corner and conversations in headlocks. There was death on the televsion – loud door knocks – no answers – a dancer then to avoidance… She shook her stuff, till her clothes sunk in a heap beneath her – ether s...
by Poet
Tue Jan 21, 2020 8:48 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Grandpa
Replies: 10
Views: 1355

Re: Grandpa

He was trim, a tall man who wore spats, a fact hidden now. Snaps always caught him on the fly laughing. Boys then longed to be traveling salesman but where’s the glory? You’re not framed or named in civic rosters. (weird premise, what was that about?) At home, he made art from wood. We recently red...
by Poet
Sun Jan 19, 2020 5:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: An Introduction
Replies: 1
Views: 240

An Introduction

I don’t like to brush my teeth And when I do I get all the food stains out, sometimes I bled out blood when I brush my teeth aswell. I think smelling even the blood and water draining out through the pipe makes me queasy, I thought if I could make time not to brush my damn teeth. I would build up al...
by Poet
Sun Jan 19, 2020 4:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Curiosity (v3b)
Replies: 30
Views: 1925

Re: Curiosity (v2)

. v2 Curiosity In the holidays she observed the cat, hidden by the rhododendron, shrinking amongst dry, yellowy culms of goose grass. She noted the incremental turning of its head away from her: golden eyes, pecked to sockets, blown full of soil. She saw how it began to snarl, and found herself smi...