Of Owls and Apple Trees

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JohnLott
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Of Owls and Apple Trees

Post by JohnLott » Fri Dec 02, 2011 2:36 pm

As my feathers are cloaked across my frame
her claws knead a knot into my shoulder

this dream I stole hides desires of forlorn man.
Her acid nest, my pigment

first feed on psilocybes around your feet
marked as heat contours a table, in rings

then take this wish as your command:
A mammal of any size dies spewing

feel shivers on your morphean skin
once she bought home a kitten, pounded its skull in

as I summon the Spirit army forth
her head turns another degree

Oh! We could conquer all as ghostly Kings
to preen bits out of her feathers.

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Post by Suzanne » Sat Dec 03, 2011 4:18 pm

Hello you two,

This is a difficult but worthwhile read. It takes a few reads to hear both voices without getting them mixed up. I like the matter of fact tone of the tree concerning animals. It's coolness towards death is unsettling and "correct". I like it.

There is definitely a regal quality to the owl.

Interesting collaboration. It is nice to read the Duet poems posted. Well done.

Suzanne

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Re: Of Owls and Apple Trees

Post by JohnLott » Sun Dec 04, 2011 3:16 pm

Thanks Suzanne,
I enjoyed doing this (perhaps Megan did too) and it's a pity that those that signed up signed off instead.

Onward to the mad xmas fest.........

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Re: Of Owls and Apple Trees

Post by calico » Mon Dec 05, 2011 1:17 pm

thanks Suzanne!
Thanks for posting this John I didn't get round to it and it's nice to see it here!

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