Niagaras

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bjondon
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Niagaras

Post by bjondon » Sun Sep 22, 2019 5:14 pm

a roof niagaras pigeons
onto our fool neighbour's
lawn

Livingstone liked to call
them flying rats
RSPB don't even list them
but lard industry experts
dedicated fields of seeds
two hundred million sterling
do not lie

we too are vermin
they the rose and emerald at least
have learnt to fly

Edited to add 'the rose and emerald'
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Re: Niagaras

Post by Joao » Mon Sep 23, 2019 10:00 am

Hi Jules,

Didn't know Livingstone had coined the term. Interesting. Is pigeon lard such a big industry? I also wondered if 'Niagara' isn't a bit too hyperbolic for a crowd of pigeons descending on a lawn. Enjoyed the read!

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Re: Niagaras

Post by NotQuiteSure » Mon Sep 23, 2019 12:16 pm

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Hi Jules,
like the opening (though, if the neighbour is a 'fool', it would be nice to know why).

'Livingstone' - this just seems too dated, now if he'd called them Nazis ...
The RSPB do list them, domesticated Rock Doves (flashed on Nigella there for some
reason).

Did you know 'vermin' has its roots in 'worm'?


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Re: Niagaras

Post by riverrun » Fri Sep 27, 2019 1:33 pm

Joining the etymologic aspect brought by NotQuiteSure, also vermin ('worm') also gave to latin root languages the color red ('vermicŭlus' / 'vermiglio' / 'vermelho'), which was made of pigment of those worms.

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