Haiku Train

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by KevJ » Fri Nov 28, 2014 7:40 pm

Take another breath
A lung full of winter air
And share with a kiss
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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Jester » Sat Nov 29, 2014 8:42 pm

And share with a kiss
This historical moment
That is filled with bliss
Just because you're paranoid it doesn't mean they're not out to get you.

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by k-j » Sun Nov 30, 2014 6:20 am

That is filled with bliss.
This is filled with blatt. Thus this
piffle agitates.
fine words butter no parsnips

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Jester » Sun Nov 30, 2014 3:33 pm

Piffle agitates
the hydrochloric acid
causing belly ache
Just because you're paranoid it doesn't mean they're not out to get you.

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Jester » Tue Dec 02, 2014 3:47 pm

Causing belly ache
is prime motive for sadists.
Better eat some chalk.
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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Jester » Wed Dec 03, 2014 6:35 pm

Better eat some chalk.
Cheese offers a great contrast -
You might want a drink.
Just because you're paranoid it doesn't mean they're not out to get you.

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by oranggunung » Fri Dec 05, 2014 6:42 pm

you might want a drink
better make it a softie
if you’re in Scotland

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Charles » Tue Dec 09, 2014 1:13 am

If you're in Scotland
Yet he walks under snowmen -
Abominable.

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by oranggunung » Sun Dec 14, 2014 10:56 am

abominable …
your gifts, your family and
the Christmas weather

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by k-j » Wed Dec 24, 2014 4:02 am

The Christmas weather:
cables prickling with ice,
coyote prints in snow.
fine words butter no parsnips

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by oranggunung » Thu Dec 25, 2014 5:56 pm

A beautiful seasonal image, k-j.
Merry Christmas.


coyote prints in snow
trying to find the “up” side
in a lone wolf state

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by k-j » Fri Dec 26, 2014 5:44 am

Thanks Og, happy xmas to you too.

In a lone-wolf state
hoofprints and two bootprints by
a new-vanished gulch.
fine words butter no parsnips

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by KevJ » Fri Jan 09, 2015 7:42 pm

A new - vanished gulch?
Here on Mars once water flowed
In time erosion
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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Gbn » Fri Jan 23, 2015 5:29 pm

In time erosion
Tunnel vision as far
As the eye can see

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by oranggunung » Wed Jan 28, 2015 10:34 pm

as the eye can see
but the fingers cannot touch
so the mouth may taste

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by KevJ » Fri Jan 30, 2015 6:39 pm

so the mouth may taste
poison on your honeyed lips
I, probing with tongue
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Re: Haiku Train

Post by oranggunung » Sat Jan 31, 2015 11:15 pm

I, probing with tongue
savour the exotic taste
of home-made hummus

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by oranggunung » Sun Feb 22, 2015 5:20 pm

of home-made hummus
and men … kitchen drama and
a Greek tragedy

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Pauline » Wed Feb 25, 2015 9:58 pm

A Greek tragedy.
Man, a being in search of
perfect baklava.

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by oranggunung » Fri Feb 27, 2015 9:36 pm

perfect baklava
a sweetmeat that will work on
so many levels

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by KevJ » Wed Mar 04, 2015 6:43 pm

So many levels
People in the penthouse
Rats in the basement
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Re: Haiku Train

Post by nar » Sun Mar 22, 2015 10:52 pm

Rats in the base meant
untrustworthy conscripts
eventually
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by oranggunung » Wed Mar 25, 2015 10:35 pm

eventually
time and gravity will beat
anti-wrinkle cream

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Katherine » Fri Apr 03, 2015 11:56 am

Anti-wrinkle cream
Doesn't work on linen skirts
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Re: Haiku Train

Post by JJWilliamson » Mon Apr 06, 2015 3:54 am

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