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The Durdle Door (revised)

Post by JJWilliamson » Mon Apr 27, 2020 3:37 pm

Oil on canvas 50 x 40 cms. The Durdle Door is to be found in Dorset, England. The colours and sheer beauty were enough to attract my attention. Just had to paint this lovely rock formation. See what you think.

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Re: The Durdle Door

Post by Macavity » Tue Apr 28, 2020 6:14 am

Interesting JJ. Are you experimenting with your style? The foreground detail has your characteristic, almost photographic reality - the green/yellow vegetation. Much of the painting draws my eye to painterly colours - is that a red ochre mixed with yellow used on the beach? Liked the eddies around the door and the section of sand/grass to the left. Not sure about the horizon line, is that an island in the distance?

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Re: The Durdle Door

Post by JJWilliamson » Tue Apr 28, 2020 3:21 pm

Thanks for the feedback, mac, and very interesting comments.
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Interesting JJ. Are you experimenting with your style? The foreground detail has your characteristic, almost photographic reality - the green/yellow vegetation. ...I'm experimenting with distance more than anything else, almost dropping the colour altogether as the view recedes.

Much of the painting draws my eye to painterly colours - is that a red ochre mixed with yellow used on the beach? ...I used Naples yellow mixed with cad red (only a touch) then lobbed a touch of gold ochre into the mix. I had to fiddle with the tone by adding some titanium white in places.

Liked the eddies around the door and the section of sand/grass to the left. Not sure about the horizon line, is that an island in the distance? ...Yes, it's a barely visible island right on the horizon. The horizon line was very pale on my source image.

thank you for sharing ...You're welcome.

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Re: The Durdle Door

Post by Perry » Wed Apr 29, 2020 10:05 am

I'm not seeing as much detail in the painting as I would like to see. Of course, the photo of the painting isn't very large, so perhaps I just can't see it because of the resolution of the picture. The foreground grass looks the most realistic to me.
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Re: The Durdle Door

Post by JJWilliamson » Wed Apr 29, 2020 6:02 pm

Thank you very much, Perry, for looking at this painting and for offering your impressions. Appreciated.

The detail is likely not so apparent because of distance. With this in mind, and because of mac's concerns, I have revised the painting to show more in the way of scale. I've added some highlights to the rock and sand, developed the island on the horizon, smoothed out some of the issues I had with the sea, placed six figures on the beach, two of them children, and finally dotted in some Sea Thrift (pink plant) on the cliff top. I hope this improves the painting. :)

I'll attempt to place the revision above the original for comparison.

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I'm not seeing as much detail in the painting as I would like to see. Of course, the photo of the painting isn't very large, so perhaps I just can't see it because of the resolution of the picture. The foreground grass looks the most realistic to me.
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Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Post by Perry » Wed Apr 29, 2020 11:16 pm

The changes are good. I like them. The figures on the beach give the picture more perspective.
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Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Post by JJWilliamson » Thu Apr 30, 2020 8:22 am

Thanks for getting back to me, Perry. I must admit that I like the changes, myself, for the very reasons you cite. The scale and perspective is much clearer with the revisions. Delighted you liked.

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The changes are good. I like them. The figures on the beach give the picture more perspective.
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Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Post by Macavity » Thu Apr 30, 2020 9:42 am

Mrs Mac and I feel the figures are a tad tiny JJ. The island is definitely more an island.

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Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Post by JJWilliamson » Fri May 01, 2020 7:31 pm

Thanks, mac and Mrs mac, for taking another look for me. Appreciated.
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Mrs Mac and I feel the figures are a tad tiny JJ. ...I'll accept a bit on the small side. :) Just me going for impact. There was a lot of short people out for a stroll that day. :)

The island is definitely more an island. ...Ah, good to know.

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Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Post by Jackie » Tue May 05, 2020 9:59 pm

JJ, to me there is a huge difference in the overall impression between the original and revised version.

The original seemed like a controlled child's book illustration, framed, enclosed. The second is wide open, and the door with the detail of people becomes a secret revelation on the edge of a massive expanse.

Just my impression

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Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Post by JJWilliamson » Sun Jun 07, 2020 9:51 am

Thank you very much, Jackie, and sorry for the late response.
I really enjoyed reading your impressions and also enjoyed
looking at the painting again through your eyes.

Thanks for that.

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Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Post by lotus » Wed Jul 01, 2020 7:04 pm

greetings JJ

an interesting canvas

i find without people more appealing

yet what i miss in the 'without people' version
is the exacting clarity of what looked in the other version as a possible landmass in the distance
the vagueness of the landmass leaves the so called "background' i bit less integrated in this painting

thankyuuu
for sharing

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