Sleeping between two women ought to be

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Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by Antcliff » Tue Oct 15, 2013 9:37 am

a pleasure,
but I don't know which way to turn.
Not before, that's easy.
Afterwards, that's the problem.
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Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
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Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by Ros » Tue Oct 15, 2013 12:16 pm

:D

true story?
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Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by twoleftfeet » Tue Oct 15, 2013 12:30 pm

You should be too knackered to worry about it..
Instead of just sitting on the fence - why not stand in the middle of the road?

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Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by Antcliff » Wed Oct 16, 2013 5:25 pm

Thanks Geoff, Ros, and Mary, Martha.
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Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by Cliff » Thu Oct 17, 2013 9:25 pm

Seth,

I've read this poem, because I really like it, a dozen times or more but it tortures me that I just can't seem to get it :oops:

One way I read it seems that you're saying that the "afterwards" problem is that whatever choice is made - (some) regret will be present in the outcome. Not sure if you're equating "sleeping" to loving two women ?

I think I may just have to go and experiment with this exact scenario to gain a better understanding - I'm sure my wife would realize that it's only all in the name of poetry ... right?

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Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by ray miller » Fri Oct 18, 2013 10:39 am

I thought at least one of the women must be an icon or in a picture, but I think you need to give more of a clue.
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.

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Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by Antcliff » Fri Oct 18, 2013 11:42 am

Thanks, Ray
one of the women must be an icon
No painting in this case, Ray. Although given my recent interest in paintings I can see how that thought might have popped up.

And thanks, Cliff
One way I read it seems that you're saying that the "afterwards" problem is that whatever choice is made - (some) regret will be present in the outcome. Not sure if you're equating "sleeping" to loving two women ?
Well, I hear N is under no illusions about the sleeping with/loving difference.
I meant something both literal and metaphorical by the "where to turn" question. I did not really have regret in mind. The question was more present+future based.

You can of course dodge the issue and sleep on your back, but there is a question of discomfort. There is a powerful argument for monogamy here.

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Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by David2 » Fri Oct 18, 2013 1:16 pm

Antcliff wrote:There is a powerful argument for monogamy here.
I can see it on a T shirt.

Embrace monogamy ...

because it's less awkward.

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Re: Sleeping between two women ought to be

Post by Antcliff » Fri Oct 18, 2013 5:22 pm

David2 wrote:
Antcliff wrote:There is a powerful argument for monogamy here.
I can see it on a T shirt.

Embrace monogamy ...
because it's less awkward.

Exactly. In the abstract it may appeal, but is he stuck in the middle?

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Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
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