Tiger Rides

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Tiger Rides

Post by Basnik » Mon Jul 11, 2016 11:49 am

You know how this works, right? Never mind,
I’m sure you’ve seen how it’s done -
you only have to hold the reins and whisper the right words.

It’s a hell of a ride.

Just don’t look too closely at the company you keep -
close your eyes if it helps.

This is definitely a heart-over-head experience,
and bear no mind to those experts
with all their warnings about tigers in public.

Sometimes, it gets scary but you riders
just escape with a few scratches
at most the odd mark, nothing that can’t
be brushed away
in time.

It’s usually the onlookers, especially the ones
who scream, that get what’s coming to them -
shouldn’t have been here in the first place,
should have known their place.

To those who say we should keep the tigers caged
somewhere in the forests of the night, to them
I’d say, there is a hell of a lot of people who like tigers,
and when I say a hell of a lot, I mean, enough.
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Re: Tiger Rides

Post by ray miller » Mon Jul 11, 2016 5:11 pm

I get the feeling that we each have a Brexit poem inside of us in these short attention-span days. I like the poem, could do with some trimming, perhaps.

shouldn’t have been here in the first place,
should have known their place.


Don't think you need the bottom line.

Your beast is very fine.

His name?

‘Death to Traitors!’
- I'd cut these too. Spells it out a bit too much

.I’d say, there is a hell of a lot of people who like tigers, - there are a hell of a lot......?
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.

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Re: Tiger Rides

Post by Basnik » Thu Jul 14, 2016 10:04 am

Hi Ray,

Thanks for the comments. I was at an Open Mic the other day in Winchester and three-quarters of the poems were Brexit poems! This one steals an image from a piece in the Guardian about the consequences of using anti-immigration rhetoric. I agree about the pruning and the last lines are too much so they will go.

Best wishes,
Richard
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Re: Tiger Rides

Post by JJWilliamson » Thu Jul 14, 2016 2:10 pm

I see you've revised this piece, judging by Ray's critique.

It's a very interesting read, compelling even, with a short life span. Pity really.

I've always found it difficult to write political poems without feeling I've just beaten
everybody over the head with my POV. In actuality I rarely show any of my real cards.
It's almost impossible to sit on the fence over Brexit, though. I voted Bremain and feel
we've all been led up the garden path. I feel for the Scot's and Northern Irish.
All of the home countries had very large minorities. That's a huge number of dissatisfied Brits.

Liked the allusion to Blake's poem.

Clever poem

Best

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Re: Tiger Rides

Post by Basnik » Sat Jul 16, 2016 11:35 am

Hi JJ,

Thanks for your kind response. It's difficult with this kind of topic to not just moan, isn't it? The language of the Leave campaign needed more scrutiny at the time.

I wonder if this will make sense in a year's time? I hope so but doubt it, I'm afraid.

Thanks again,
Richard
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Post by David » Sat Jul 16, 2016 12:12 pm

Hello Richard! Nice to see you back.

Yes, a perfectly decent response to the Brexit trauma, this. The last verse, in particular, is very good.

Cheers

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Post by Jackie » Sat Jul 16, 2016 12:24 pm

Richard,

Even now the Tiger could represent a variety of global experiences so I don't see that the poem's days need to be limited. In fact, isn't that one lesson of the Brexit viewpoint? That withdrawing will not keep the diverse world at bay?

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Post by Boat » Sat Jul 16, 2016 6:34 pm

Hello, Basnik.

I thought this poem was about the 1975 referrendum where the Great British public were duped into a political union that they didn't vote for. And, after over forty years of riding the tiger of lies and deciet they finally, luckily, with all the chips stacked against them, got to exercise their democratic right to vote to leave that which they should never have been a part of to begin with.
Brexit is the re-run, but this time people actually knew that they were voting on an economic and a political union and voted accordingly. Democracy has been served, justice done. I assume by this poem and your later comments that you feel it was ok to be tricked into the union but strangly you feel it is not ok to be 'tricked' out of it? A very peculiar position.

Although not an accurate reflection of Brexit (much closer to the 1975 referendum in places)it is still a nice poem for what it is.

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Re: Tiger Rides

Post by Basnik » Tue Jul 19, 2016 12:15 pm

Thanks for the comments. Hi David, good to be back - I'll try and be more habitual poster and critic. Jackie, thank you, I'm glad you feel it has more legs. Hi Pat, I think we may be at odds on this one, politically. I was only five at the time of the first one so not au fait with the rhetoric of that campaign (not an excuse for not knowing about that perhaps, but I will nonetheless have to claim ignorance). I think there is some dangerous language around both sides at the moment but I was responding in particular to the speeches of the Hannons et al, who knew what they were doing with their words, and it think has fostered quite an ugly mood in some parts.

Anyway, thanks again all for taking the time to read it.

Regards,
Richard
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