Calling Time

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Calling Time

Post by ray miller » Mon Oct 24, 2016 9:16 am

We’ve been carrying a torch for you, which
finally has lit; it burns through halls and galleries
and turns them black and crisp. Your eyes will sting,
the tears we bring are music to our lips.

History has grown either too tall or too obese;
what’s deliquesced from the polar tips
reappears west and east of the equator.
Revisionism isn’t given any quarter.

The trees have fallen silent on the library shelves
and in this hugger-mugger hush the dead conspire
to trip us up, but if we don’t go by the book
no one is left to scream that we’re back numbers.

The Central Committee has decided
to put down a hefty stake in the ground
where you played poker with the monkey and the snake.
Your feet will hiss in rhythm with the rattle of the cage.
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Re: The Central Committee has decided

Post by 1lankest » Mon Oct 24, 2016 8:00 pm

hmmm, intriguing. I would be lying if I said I knew what this was about. I know you have given clues, but I'm yet to make meaningful associations between them yet.

The question is, who is the 'you' in line one? I'm thinking it is knowledge, truth.

I'm thinking this about ignorance winning out over wisdom.

I'm thinking it's about globalisation, global warming, corruption blah blah blah.

If I'm wrong i'll get my coat.

I like it any how. Plenty to return to.

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Re: The Central Committee has decided

Post by camus » Tue Oct 25, 2016 12:13 am

"The Central Committee" sounds almost ominous, but not quite.

Intriguing indeed. There are clues (should we need them, I do!) that point to global warming and if so I'd question the use of:

"History has grown either too tall or too obese;"

I can't really see the point in both?

"what’s deliquesced from the polar tips
reappears west and east of the equator."

Are excellent lines and perhaps the crux?

"hugger-mugger" I really wasn't keen on, onomatopoeic hippy nonsense, maybe?

From then on I lost interest because I couldn't join the dots, either my failing or yours?

Be interested to know the meaning, man...

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Re: The Central Committee has decided

Post by JJWilliamson » Tue Oct 25, 2016 6:38 am

Could be about anything, Ray. It reads like a super duper cryptic crossword clue.

I thought of the ozone layer and deforestation with the United Nations as the central committee.
Trees, polar regions, and the thinning of the ozone near the equator nudged me in this direction.
There are no regions east and west of the equator on Earth so I'm confused even further.
But you know that, so what does/can it mean. Instinctively I wanted to see prime or Greenwich meridian.
However, I'm not convinced about any of these shots in the dark.

I also thought of Russia and China and the more I read the poem the more I drift towards a political observation and warning.
Reap as you sow. :?

Too cryptic to be enjoyed, for me.

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Re: Calling Time

Post by ray miller » Tue Oct 25, 2016 10:30 am

Thanks, fellas. Summat I discarded a few months back and just lately added another verse. I should've left it where it was. But I shall act as if a change in title will solve everything. It's summat to do with rewriting history. I was gonna call it Time Must Have A Stop, then I found I'd already got a poem of that name! Hugger-mugger is in Hamlet, by the way.
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Re: Calling Time

Post by camus » Tue Oct 25, 2016 11:13 am

Hugger-mugger is in Hamlet, by the way.
Ha, see, what does Shakey know? To be fair I've only ever read Othello.
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Re: Calling Time

Post by ton321 » Sat Oct 29, 2016 12:47 am

We’ve been carrying a torch for you, which
finally has lit; it burns through halls and galleries
and turns them black and crisp. Your eyes will sting,
the tears we bring are music to our lips.

History has grown either too tall or too obese;
what’s deliquesced from the polar tips
reappears west and east of the equator.
Revisionism isn’t given any quarter.

The trees have fallen silent on the library shelves
and in this hugger-mugger hush the dead conspire
to trip us up, but if we don’t go by the book
no one is left to scream that we’re back numbers.

The Central Committee has decided
to put down a hefty stake in the ground
where you played poker with the monkey and the snake.
Your feet will hiss in rhythm with the rattle of the cage.


Hi Ray,
I liked it even though i was left groping what it was about. I enjoyed the rhythm and half-rhyme, but the references are a bit obtuse/obscure.
Cheers Tony.
Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.

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Re: Calling Time

Post by bodkin » Mon Oct 31, 2016 9:53 am

Some remark as others really, enjoyed in parts, got references to current global catastrophes (potential or actual) but didn't grasp the whole.

I saw some mention of rewriting history, but not enough to take it as the overall subject.

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Re: Calling Time

Post by ray miller » Mon Oct 31, 2016 1:33 pm

Thanks for the comments. It's a bit fantastical, I suppose. One to leave for a few hundred years.
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