Time for a new exercise

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Time for a new exercise

Post by Antcliff » Fri Mar 11, 2016 1:40 pm

since the "Poem Diary" idea did not produce any fellow exercisers.

The exercise = write a poem which has at least 30 lines.

I have not helped I'm sure....being somewhat minimalist in inclination...but the poems around here seem to be shorter and shorter. If it goes on like this we will end up like Samuel Beckett...writing "plays" with no words, only people moving in hoods across a chessboard.


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We fray into the future, rarely wrought
Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
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Re: Time for a new exercise

Post by bodkin » Fri Mar 11, 2016 10:33 pm

I am already somewhat on the verbose side, but I'm game... you want them posted below here?

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Re: Time for a new exercise

Post by Antcliff » Sun Mar 13, 2016 1:22 pm

Yeh, posted below!
We fray into the future, rarely wrought
Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
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Re: Time for a new exercise

Post by bodkin » Mon Mar 14, 2016 7:25 pm

Expatriate


In some other world I live
and living in that place give little thought
to distant space-time, place-hour delusions
most-commonly called real.

I live, I feel, through a glass unlooked-for
on dust-framed afternoons
within that simple plaster room
above a Martian restaurant
within that tangled nest of streets
behind the Practical Works
in the sometimes smell
of roasting sand-squid and I live

quite close to Literal Plaza. And I live
in clothes bought second hand
from the scarecrow woman in plain
brown shift, sight, speech and her cart
of dubious wonders who wanders-meanders
place to faded place at walking pace
throughout the rust-red city

and I relish the living,
hand-to-mouth as sometimes is,
and I reside, and sell my alien nature
to those who have the wit to ask:

when the rains failed,
when thieves waylaid your caravan
when everybody voted for the wrong man
and when the World was not
the way a world's supposed to be...

...why then, what did the Humans do?
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Re: Time for a new exercise

Post by Antcliff » Thu Mar 17, 2016 10:41 am

Loved "quite close to Literal Plaza". I heard you lived closer to Metaphor Moor.
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Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
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Re: Time for a new exercise

Post by Caffoy » Fri Mar 18, 2016 10:07 pm

Beware the unwritten rules, Ros is top dog and will make sure you are embarrassed publicly.
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Re: Time for a new exercise

Post by David » Sat Mar 19, 2016 2:59 pm

Enjoyed that read, Caffoy. (Your name? Or pen-name?)

Interestingly, I couldn't place it geographically. That's not necessarily a criticism.

Perhaps "fragile as a faun" seems a little clichéd, especially when she's just been a caribou (to his wolf, an image I liked).
Caffoy wrote:She knew; we all knew. We all withdrew
I like the way that sings.

In fact - even if it only started as an exercise of over 30 lines - it's really nice. But the ending did sort of elude me.

Nice to read you.

Cheers

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Re: Time for a new exercise

Post by Firebird » Mon Mar 21, 2016 4:29 pm

I too like your poem caffoy. If I've understood the ending correctly, your poem is saying Einstein's wife came up with relativity? If this is what was meant or not, either way it was a really good read.

Thanks for posting.

Cheers,

Tristan

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