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New Challenge

Post by Antcliff » Sat May 02, 2015 2:35 pm

Cinquains time! As in the Jan Harris poems in the recent Snakeskin short poems edition.

http://www.simmers1.webspace.virginmedia.com/index.html

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cinquain
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Re: New Challenge

Post by David » Sat May 02, 2015 4:24 pm

I like this idea, but I've forgotten where we post them. In this thread? Or elsewhere?

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Re: New Challenge

Post by Antcliff » Sat May 02, 2015 4:35 pm

Let us go wild and post them here in this thread.
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Re: New Challenge

Post by Antcliff » Sun May 03, 2015 6:17 pm

Lamb time,
fields of infants,
short jumps and leaps, these days
are intoxication for them,
small bliss.
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Re: New Challenge

Post by David » Sun May 03, 2015 6:20 pm

Antcliff wrote:Lamb time,
fields of infants.
short jumps and leaps, these days
are intoxication for them,
small bliss.
Very timely. And I like small bliss. (Comma after infants?)

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Re: New Challenge

Post by David » Sun May 03, 2015 6:23 pm

I've checked.
There's nothing wrong
with the cat-flap. It's
the cat that is malfunctioning
instead.

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Re: New Challenge

Post by Antcliff » Sun May 03, 2015 6:42 pm

Like that, David. I sense there could be a few variations on the theme. :D
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Re: New Challenge

Post by Antcliff » Sun May 03, 2015 6:44 pm

GOVAN HOGBACKS


Some say,
tiled, odd houses.
The folk say: animals.
I say a cross between a roof
and back.


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Re: New Challenge

Post by David » Sun May 03, 2015 6:53 pm

The animals have it for me. They do look like large stone guinea pigs.

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Re: New Challenge

Post by k-j » Mon May 04, 2015 4:52 am

Sesqui-
pedalian-
ism only gets you
so far. Short words are better, grunts
best. Ugh.
fine words butter no parsnips

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Re: New Challenge

Post by k-j » Mon May 04, 2015 4:53 am

David wrote:I've checked.
There's nothing wrong
with the cat-flap. It's
the cat that is malfunctioning
instead.
This is great!
fine words butter no parsnips

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Re: New Challenge

Post by Magpie Jane » Wed May 06, 2015 12:46 am

cosmic mermaid cinquain

chrome-pearled,
hushed, she dived in,
swirled, jived to spin the world,
then blushed to see its foam-hived grin
unfurled

:mrgreen:
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Re: New Challenge

Post by bodkin » Wed May 06, 2015 9:33 pm

k-j wrote:
David wrote:I've checked.
There's nothing wrong
with the cat-flap. It's
the cat that is malfunctioning
instead.
This is great!
Absolutely, publish at once!
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Re: New Challenge

Post by bodkin » Wed May 06, 2015 9:41 pm

stop blithering

resume
normal service
I'm fed up with it now
just bloody pull your fingers out
and vote
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Re: New Challenge

Post by Magpie Jane » Wed May 06, 2015 11:58 pm

Ahhh. This is fun; I had never really realised it could actually be done.

(on rereading STC:)

Down dropt
the breeze, the sails
dropt down
. We knelt on deck,
hostage to the deep dark droning
songlines.

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Re: New Challenge

Post by Antcliff » Thu May 07, 2015 9:51 am

What is STC, Jane?

Good stuff, Ian, K-J, Jane, David!


.................................

SUNLIT CINQUAIN

Warm cheek.
Unexpected.
Next, a quilt of birdsong,
pillow of the singing feathers
of snipe.
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Re: New Challenge

Post by bodkin » Thu May 07, 2015 11:19 am

It took me a moment, but Samuel Taylor Coleridge...
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Re: New Challenge

Post by Antcliff » Thu May 07, 2015 4:55 pm

bodkin wrote:It took me a moment, but Samuel Taylor Coleridge...
Doh! Slaps own head...of course it is.
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Re: New Challenge

Post by David » Thu May 07, 2015 8:05 pm

Glad you like my silly cat one. (True story, though.)
k-j wrote:Sesqui-
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ism only gets you
so far. Short words are better, grunts
best. Ugh.
Quite right, k-j. Good stuff. To my shame, I had to look up your big word.

Two marine ones, Jane! And a public service one from Ian, and a sunny one from Seth. These are all good. This is a terrific little format, and I've never used it before. (I think.)

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Re: New Challenge

Post by Magpie Jane » Thu May 07, 2015 11:19 pm

Silly catflap, snipe feathers and everything, marvily enjoyable! Will this be the format to bring the unknown out in us all?


Look now:
the optical
barometer salesman.
He ain't got no feckin' juju
eyeballs.

(inspired by ETA Hoffmann's Sandmann)
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Re: New Challenge

Post by bodkin » Fri May 08, 2015 9:45 am

"optical barometer" ??

Does this just mean one that's not invisible?
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Re: New Challenge

Post by bodkin » Fri May 08, 2015 9:48 am

there's no
bloody mandate
you're just not ousted yet
politics and democracy
pshaw
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Re: New Challenge

Post by Magpie Jane » Fri May 08, 2015 11:15 pm

Ian, it's just that he's selling optical appliances as well as barometers. Comprehensive salesmanship.


Quiet.
Pass the ammo
and look the other way.
There'll be time enough for countin'
(I hope).

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Re: New Challenge

Post by David » Mon May 11, 2015 6:26 pm

A Spring one!

Primrose,
prima rosa,
not a prima donna
but what a pretty chorus girl
in Spring.

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Re: New Challenge

Post by Antcliff » Sun May 31, 2015 5:29 pm

The only thing
in the ruined croft cottage



Brass bed,
roof gone, door gone.
Where the wind sometimes rests,
undisturbed by rain, whispering
at stars
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