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Greetings, Silent. Nice to see you calling by.1lankest wrote:'arms length away' is idiomatic and cliched but it works here, I think. I find the poem's language original I just don't have a clue what's being said, really. Perhaps more grounded imagery needed.
Cheers,
L
Antcliff wrote:
Greetings, Silent. Nice to see you calling by.![]()
Has PC collapsed? I've not called by there since the new landlord took over and various old faces departed for foreign lands. I know a new site was set up by various ex-eds, but I haven't visited.
Seth
1lankest wrote:'arms length away' is idiomatic and cliched but it works here, I think. I find the poem's language original I just don't have a clue what's being said, really. Perhaps more grounded imagery needed.
Cheers,
L
dear Rosschuringa wrote:Since you asked.
'night black' is not only cliche but at odds with 'dined under streetlights' black means without light, 'god's sky' is also archaic, which god? and if it is black how can you see the sky.
best wishes
Ross.
churinga wrote: I have the impression English is not your first language.
Ross.
dear JJJJWilliamson wrote:Hi, Lotus
This reads like a stream of consciousness poem to me, where one thing leads to another. There is a charm in the seemingly disconnected strophes
that has me puzzling over the raison d'etre, and Yet I find myself liking the movement.
churinga wrote:Since you asked.
Also when you post poems you can use various commands to create the lay out you want, the only thing you can't change is the font. You don't need to post a photo of a page from a book, it looks amateurish and second hand.
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